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Touched by an Angel’s Wing
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Touched by an Angel’s Wing |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
In the depths of human despair no lower place to crawl sucking on my own black soul feeling nothing, nothing at all. My heart broken, nothing new so I lie here alone and think of you. Blackness envelops me I revel in it’s profanity with both hands I release life and give up my humanity. My heart broken nothing new so I lie here alone wanting you. You touched me with your angel's wing breathed your life into my soul. Now, alone, dread of dawning light spiraling into this hole. My heart broken nothing new so I lie here alone needing you. Giving love one more chance thinking you could save me whispers in the back of my heart taunted me for my insanity. My heart broken nothing new so I lie here alone without you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sooooo sad, Sharon. Heartbreaking. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Welcome back. We'll be lonely....together. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you Denise....let's share a box of Kleenex.. Richard, come here..sit by me and we'll commiserate together. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
And a welcome back with a bang..very nice write that wrenches at the soul...good seeing you Poet...very gentle smile |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Can I be lonely with you guys as well?  |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
You beautifully described that all too familiar feeling I know I get when thinking of my ex. Well said and welcome back. |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
The echo of that lonely sound resonates profoundly in each stanza...a well written piece. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
This takes us places we sometimes don't want to go, but need to now and then. You have been taking us there more and more of late.. nicely done There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
So much sadness everywhere sharon...but I'm still here to listen. CALL ME ANYTIME. Love you, my sister. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
In all honesty, I read this because I couldn't believe the title was yours. The feelings are audible! The thought...I more than understand. Bizarre, how bizarre. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Sad, touching piece you have here. Flowed very well, smooth and well structured. Liked this much. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"In the depths of human despair no lower place to crawl sucking on my own black soul feeling nothing, nothing at all." "whispers in the back of my heart taunted me for my insanity." Oh Sharon ... beautifully done. Excellent phrasing - the repetetive phrase really emphasizes your theme perfectly! You've captured the mood wonderfully with these words, I really enjoyed this piece!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This is a place a lot of people have been once, and probably will be again. You write it well...and it is sure good to see you posting again! ~ Give the heavens above more than just a passing glance ~And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance ~ I hope you dance. (Lee Ann Womack) |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sharon, my heart ached while reading this. you are an amazing writer, and the depth at which you write this is awesome. the repetition of the main lines really drove home the point. excellent write, though very very sad. take care kind poetress. amy "but i see your true colors, |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Some powerfully dark images here make this a somber yet brilliant write. I loved the artistry of it and pray it is fiction. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon- Wow..this just aches... You've expressed the pain very well. Nicely done. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh Sharon, so full of ache and so well expressed - you speak of my life in this  was that you looking over my shoulder?!  Take care, Melissa~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
:cryihg: I recently lost someone I cared so deeply about so I KNOW how this feels, you feel completely separated from everything... " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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