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Trillium
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0 posted 2001-07-24 03:42 PM





Sea-Surge

In the harbor I perceive
A sailing ship prepare to leave.
As she turns to face the sea,
Her figurehead looks out at me.

Lovely lady, made of wood,
Looks so real I almost could
Think that I can hear her sigh,
Musing on the miles gone by.

Pretty face with hair a-curl.
Does she represent a girl
Someone loved and hoped to keep
Close beside him on the deep?

She courts the wind; fears the reef,
Afraid her ship will come to grief.
Riding where the wild waves cream.
Is she just a sailor's dream?

As I watch the tack she'll take,
Gray mists swirling, hide her wake.
She is out of sight now, so,
Reluctantly, I turn to go,
But I hear the buoy toll.
Feel a sea-surge in my soul!


Betty Lou Hebert

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shadow974
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1 posted 2001-07-24 03:49 PM


Very nicely written I have always wondered what the woman was called. Is she a sailors dream? Does she move about the ship and protect her men? Sure she does!!!

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

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2 posted 2001-07-24 03:50 PM


really vivid
well done
especially enjoyed the last line

I really think one could feel the sea-surge after such an experience


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"Feel a sea-surge in my soul!"

love that  

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4 posted 2001-07-24 04:47 PM


BettyLou~
You write so vividly ...
This is just lovely, lovely, lovely~
~*Marge*~

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5 posted 2001-07-24 04:58 PM


yes.. this is nice.. very very nice...


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6 posted 2001-07-24 05:53 PM


Trillium,
You write and rhyme well, I enjoyed this read.

Trillium
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7 posted 2001-07-24 06:34 PM


shadow974:  I guess the figurehead must have been a composite of many sailor's dreams, as they came in so many styles. Blonde, brunette and redheads!  Thanks for commenting.

Betty Lou Hebert

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8 posted 2001-07-24 06:36 PM


VAS:  Thanks.  It does move one to watch a sailing ship leave harbor and see the figurehead staring out to sea.  Or maybe it's just something that affects me!

Betty Lou Hebert

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9 posted 2001-07-24 06:37 PM


Sea: thanks for your nice comments.

Marge:  I'm glad you liked this one and thanks for your compliment.

Betty Lou Hebert

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10 posted 2001-07-24 06:38 PM


Cpat Hair and Seymour:  Thank you both for taking time to read this and I appreciate your comments.

Betty Lou Hebert

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