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Twenty or Less...#19 |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Drained fluidity Down To Stripped sand Dryness Desert Wind-like Blanket Spinning my write Into Nothing (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
The tornadic action has begun! Bravo! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice... sparse placement of words enhances the feel... and reinforces the images... one thing crossed my mind stripped sand? I kept seeing it as striped, as in wind striped..adding texture to the image.. amazing where ones mind goes.. somtimes.. Good Read and one to keep... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Decaflame: the tornado is always cycling; it's a matter of what's in its path and what will become one with it, if even for a brief moment... That's what I'm enjoying also about this style, Ron -- that the words may connotate different things and pictures. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." --Del Casher [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (edited 07-24-2001).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Okay..I got this image: Someone pulled the plug in the bottom of the ocean and it rushed down leaving nothing, but wind and sand and someone to draw their name in it. Like a clean sheet of paper. Like starting over and making the best of what you have. Leave it to me to be different. Fantastic! Sincerely, Rwood |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I like that, Regina! Very unique, indeed. Ripe visual for a poem (hint, hint...wink, wink...nudge, nudge...say no more...) -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Mark, This was very visual, as sometimes in life we can just get so entangled in our dreams that never come true, and our elusive fairytale hopes. But soon the moments gain momentum again, and we are off to create that utopia that we all harbor in our hearts... Elise |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Nice write Mark. I really enjoyed the way you worked the words. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Reminds me of being in the desert, which was not very pleasant at all. Though I see what you were showing. And if we let the winds take us away, what then? Land in Oz, perhaps? Sandra |
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