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Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2001-07-23 10:05 PM

Black Widow Of Time

Dare not gaze at me
in this tangled thread of life
cobwebs age my soul
destroying youth's vast canvas
time's plume no longer stirs dreams

By Melissa P. Monette

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2001-07-23 10:22 PM

Oh WOW, you just said it so perfectly. Time feels an enemy to me, often.
Sandra

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

2 posted 2001-07-24 09:34 PM

I really loved the depth of this verse. It grasps the whole of aging and youth to me. Wonderful!
Sincerely,
Rwood

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-07-26 09:01 AM

yes..nicely said.. I enoyed this a great deal

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-07-26 09:04 AM

Melissa,
Well done but I don't believe it. Sy

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

5 posted 2001-07-26 10:11 AM

Excellent, Miss Honeybee!

*smiles*
~Tier

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-07-26 01:09 PM

I'm like Sy. . . I don't believe it either. . . but, it's a fine poem. . .

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Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-07-26 02:30 PM

Melissa~
Quite the tick of time~
Well done, poetess~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

8 posted 2001-07-26 02:41 PM

Great work! Dalianesque!

Cor

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

9 posted 2001-07-26 02:52 PM

wow! powerful and bitter/sweet

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

10 posted 2001-08-01 05:03 AM

I'm impressed!

you made writing a tanka seem so easy...

ohh, i feel that way too sometimes...sometimes i feel old and haggard in a young body

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2002-03-14 10:58 PM

(sigh) Sooooooooo powerfully bittersweet, dearest friend, my heart goes out to you and I hope now your youth shines with gossamer lace and the child in your heart sings once more with silkened laughter and hope! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is marvelous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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