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Open Poetry #15

Soft, what light

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-07-23 01:43 PM

Soft, what light shines upon my trail,
Cast, with the shadows from the trees,
Dim, where my eyes can barely tell,
Till, waves with motion of the breeze;
Lights, moon and stars filling the night.

Walk, where pathways of stone lead me,
Through, with the night time losing sleep,
Dreams, make visions for eyes to see,
Move, commitments once made to keep,
Climb, the way to a place to be.

Soft, what light shines behind my walk,
Time, repeats events of shadow,
Think, old memories still stalk,
Back, to a hidden spot I know.

Gloom

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-07-23 01:51 PM

interesting read..I like the language and form...
the imagery is good here...nicely done

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2001-07-23 01:55 PM

Thank you,
your words are very kind,
I am pleased my words please you.
It could be a play off of Willie Shake,
since I've read so much of his works,
so many times.
But I was working off a broken form on this one
and a salvaged poem from days ago.

Gloom

[This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 07-23-2001).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-07-23 02:01 PM

a play off of Shakespeare or just a sound of word you like?

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-07-23 02:08 PM

I would be inclined to want to say the same as Cpat, including the question.

"Soft. what light through window brakes?"

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