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To What do I Owe?
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To What do I Owe? |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
To what do I owe This feeling of woe I try not to show So only I'll know? A feeling within Of the greatest chagrin Though outside I've been Always mannequin... The Love that I lost Is one never had And how great the cost Of this dream gone bad... Inspiration eternal Flows forth from this well, But the pain is infernal: From the bowels of Hell. For every word written And every phrase sung, My heart has been bitten By Desire's toungue: A desire to get, A desire to give A desire to forget And a desire to forgive... (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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mpt Junior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 32australia |
that sent a shiver down my spine. it feels like youve written that thinking of my own personal situation. amazing! Though dreams can be deceiving |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, this gives me chills, I so much have been there. It's a fight to get out, too. Good strong poem. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Such is the power of honest poetry, mpt. Glad this resonated with you, and thanks for reading & replying. Sandra, keep fighting -- writing these types of poems serves as good exorcisms, you know... just stay clear of its pea-green soup... :-) -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Honest? Yes I would say the power of words lies in main with the amount of honesty they are used.. Nicely done Mark... the honesty comes through very well.. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thanks, Ron. Honesty can be a lonely road but the sojourn is worth every step... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
This was a very powerful dramatization, very straightforward, and full of truth! Enjoyed this one very much!  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Dulcinea, thanks for the read and reply. Glad you enjoyed. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Very Well Done Thank You |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Great poem, loved every line. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To what do I owe This feeling of woe I try not to show So only I'll know? A feeling within Of the greatest chagrin Though outside I've been Always mannequin... The Love that I lost Is one never had And how great the cost Of this dream gone bad... Inspiration eternal Flows forth from this well, But the pain is infernal: From the bowels of Hell. ================== Your vocab and cadence in this is a poetic pleasure.. very cool poem Mark... yes...haunting, chilling and impactuous both in emote and imagery well done poet sir..once again only you could give love that satisfies the soul... |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
The Love that I lost Is one never had Ahh, my friend, sometimes those are ever the worst...gentle smile...nicely done |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
The Love that I lost Is one never had ====== They say (you can't lose what you never had)..... and yet the pain of that is always great.. "And how great the cost Of this dream gone bad... Inspiration eternal Flows forth from this well, But the pain is infernal: From the bowels of Hell." Indeed, how great the cost?...... A very well done and expressive piece.... The pain is almost tangible...... Thank you dear friend ************************** |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Mark this really rocks...this one should go on a world tour...James |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Here's to the hope of a pain that word's shed, and that a new a Love that lies unseen ahead. Enjoyed |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Connie. Wow -- every line? Thanks, Walker. JM: Thank you, kindly... this was going to be a slow swing-groove/strut jazz-kind-of song for a "torchy" vocal, but I never got around to finishing it, so I kept it as a poem. Glad you enjoyed. Most certainly they are, Logan. Unrequited and spited... but at least channeled into something artistic... Thanks for the thoughts. MEM: But you can lose everything attached to the virtual and vicarious nature and impression of "what you don't have", and therein lie the pain and growth... Thank you for your kind words. James -- World tour?? Man, I sure hope not! I hope that it's never heard again! :-] Thanks for the funniest reply I've gotten from you! :-) Thank you, Richard, for the kind thoughts. Luckily, this is a chronicle from the past, but in its own way, universal to many, I'm sure... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
you've keyed up a mighty powerful piece! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Glad you think so, Virginia... it was a "channeled self-analysis" at the time... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This likes me - a lot! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
You're cute, Sunshine -- I like that little phrase of yours. I'm glad it likes you too. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Mark, A great write. I have been there. We always want what we can't have. But someday..... Elise |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Glad to see you're still around, Elise -- where've you been hiding? I'd like to read some more of your works... Thanks for the stop-by. (Ever notice how we can always have what we don't want?) -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
I found your internal organ & religion mix highlighted human ferocities spur of the moment reasoning . I guess with no pea skins,& drunk from a cup, pea soup maybe permissible. Cold sores from a wild spoon take preasious healing time. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
thecraig: come again... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--In my mind, the last line of your poem is powerful medicine for moving on and for personal growth. I like the way you write this! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Martie... This was a self-analysis at the time and proved to be its own medicine. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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