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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 2001-07-23 08:35 AM


If I had never loved, I never would have cried
‘All things come full circle,’ said I
‘I’ll just gather my things, and then am homeward bound’
And she just sat there stone faced, daring not a sound
Somehow I knew we would be strangers forever more
As soon as I walked out the closing door
Now I hear the drizzle of rain outside my window
Such as a voice that fills my head like an echo
I wonder what she is doing on this dreary day
If chance brought us together, what would I say?
I would surely be a different man before her eyes
From the corner of her mind where my memory lies
Back then was a time of innocence
Unafraid we were of the consequence
A moment of time that will never be again
She helped shape the man that I am
How could time rob me so surely of this memory?
Every day brings another loss of mental clarity
But a sense of who I was always remains
Even so long after all the growing pains
Still there are questions left unasked
As I resign myself to the torturous task
Of wondering about a love that died,
And simply wondering, why?

© Copyright 2001 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-23 08:57 AM


nicely done...
Lady In White
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2 posted 2001-07-23 09:01 AM



We may indeed never know why we go through the losses that we do...

I have come to accept the fact that I was in someone's life for a reason...and some reasons may never be fully explained...

all I can hope, is that I leave behind smiles...

So very glad to see you posting again, PK...keep it up!

Martini
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3 posted 2001-07-23 09:24 AM


WOW

THIS HIT HOME, THERE ARE PEOPLE WHO YOU CAN'T SEEM TO REASON TO WHY YOU WERE EVER IN THIER LIFE SINCE IT HURTS SO MUCH BEINGO UT OF IT.  IT'S LIKE A CREUL TRICK.

AWESOME POEM.
NICELY DONE MY FRIEND.
  

"In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On"
~Robert Frost


Janet Marie
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4 posted 2001-07-23 09:28 AM


Somehow I knew we would be strangers forever more
As soon as I walked out the closing door
Now I hear the drizzle of rain outside my window
Such as a voice that fills my head like an echo
I wonder what she is doing on this dreary day
If chance brought us together, what would I say?
I would surely be a different man before her eyes
From the corner of her mind where my memory lies
Back then was a time of innocence
Unafraid we were of the consequence
A moment of time that will never be again
She helped shape the man that I am
How could time rob me so surely of this memory?
Every day brings another loss of mental clarity
But a sense of who I was always remains
Even so long after all the growing pains
============================================

A poeticly lovely bittersweet write PK...
the traces left behind ... they both haunt and comfort us...
beautiful poem of self discovery in what once was.



only you could give love that satisfies the soul...
see the darkness of my heart and still won't let me go.

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 07-23-2001).]

mpt
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5 posted 2001-07-23 10:15 AM


beautiful poem, i also lost a love once and didnt know why, so i can relate to this a lot...thank you

Though dreams can be deceiving
Like faces are to hearts
They serve for sweet relieving
When fantasy and reality lie too far apart
- Fiona Apple

snowpants
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6 posted 2001-07-23 06:12 PM


'From the corner of her mind where my memory lies
Back then was a time of innocence
Unafraid we were of the consequence
A moment of time that will never be again'

This really is an awesome write, PK...sometimes it is hard to figure out why some truly good things end..I love this...

sp  

it was love that first drew me,
it is love that will keep me here...
now I see love burning brightly
when everything else is unclear...

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2001-07-23 06:20 PM


PoeticKnight~

‘All things come full circle,’

Yes ... and in the turning - returning the loveliest of memories.
Answers aren't always found ...
but we continue to turn the memories, one sweet page at a time.

Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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8 posted 2001-07-23 06:32 PM


Welcome back ... we may not have the answers, but we are here nonetheless

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth
http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/Interloper.htm

Sven
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9 posted 2001-07-23 07:00 PM


welcome back my friend. . . this piece is wonderful. . . truly speaks from the heart of love. . .

the memories and emotions here are very real. . . and your form is wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

walker
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10 posted 2001-07-23 07:13 PM


I have to say one of my favorite poems, absolutely wonderful. Thanks for this one!
Dark Angel
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11 posted 2001-07-23 08:51 PM


Wonderful!

I enjoyed  

Maree

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little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~


mirror man
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12 posted 2001-07-23 10:14 PM


This is interesting.
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