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This Is A Moment (that once was a memory)

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Jamie
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0 posted 07-21-2001 11:17 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

This Is A Moment ( that once was a memory )

The ground begins to refuse the rain
while the sky sadly promises more.
Restless clouds mill about in valleys -
and drift up against hillsides
before slowly moving upward
to scale their earthen dam.
They  spill over forested  ridges
as if needing to feel the other side.

It couldn’t have been yesterday
when we shared this gathering of gray –
for the naked fuzz of branches
finding modesty  beneath  misted veil,
are now flush with summer’s  wooing -
their green nearly black with rain.

“These Are The Moments”,  is
accompanied by the screak of wipers
as they stutter noisily across the glass.  
Silencing the discordant intruder, I smile,
realising – This  
is one of the moments.

Raindrops scattering tiny prisms
lend a surrealness to the scene
as the clear drops mottle the clouds.
Distance becomes less a matter of judgment
than of instinct,  time is bent by the music,
and memory becomes slanted by desire.

I think of you in your green winter,
choosing whether you would prefer
to sit on white or black sand when you
admire a south pacific view which has
inspired words you give to lighthouses,
and a love of home as great as my own.

When the time has come for season’s change
and for trees to again stand naked in the rain,
I will return to this place and think of you -
judging distance with a sailor's eyes , while
taking your ocean's pulse in measured tides.
Even as time changes moments into memories,
our times together will forever turn to moments.


~For Kamla~

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

© Copyright 2001 Jamie Patterson - All Rights Reserved
rwood
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1 posted 07-21-2001 11:36 PM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

How wonderful! To choose to relive moments over and over in minds sweet memory. Than to simply put it on a shelf of lost time. Great decision, great work, great read.
Sincerely,
Rwood
Janet Marie
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2 posted 07-21-2001 11:40 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Raindrops scattering tiny prisms
lend a surrealness to the scene
as the clear drops mottle the clouds.
Distance becomes less a matter of judgment
than of instinct,  time is bent by the music,
and memory becomes slanted by desire.


I think of you in your green winter,
choosing whether you would prefer
to sit on white or black sand when you
admire a south pacific view which has
inspired words you give to lighthouses,
and a love of home as great as my own.

When the time has come for season’s change
and for trees to again stand naked in the rain,
I will return to this place and think of you -
judging distance with a sailor's eyes , while
taking your ocean's pulse in measured tides.
Even as time changes moments into memories,
our times together will forever turn to moments.


=================================

"excuse my french" but...DAMN this is beautiful!!
my my my ... *sigh*  
jm

only you could give love that satisfies the soul...
see the darkness of my heart and still won't let me go.

Dark Angel
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3 posted 07-22-2001 12:18 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

I think of you in your green winter,
choosing whether you would prefer
to sit on white or black sand when you
admire a south pacific view which has
inspired words you give to lighthouses,
and a love of home as great as my own.


Yup I'm with JM on this..... very beautiful!

Wonderful writing Jamie  

Maree

"little miss understood
little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~

JLR
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4 posted 07-22-2001 12:49 AM       View Profile for JLR   Email JLR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JLR

Even as time changes moments into memories,
our times together will forever turn to moments...
Distance becomes less a matter of judgment
than of instinct,  time is bent by the music,
and memory becomes slanted by desire...
Even as time changes moments into memories,
our times together will forever turn to moments...
Jamie---Thank you for the poetic celebration to what love can be!
Jamie
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rwood: Thank you, and sometimes these moments just present themselves.


JM: On vous permet de dire qu'en n'importe quelle langue vous choisissez mon ami.  
Mercis.

Maree: I am glad you think so MM. You also "are allowed to say that in any language you choose". Thank you.

JLR: Thanks for reading and replying.

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Janet Marie
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6 posted 07-22-2001 12:10 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Well I dont have a clue what you just said,,
but have mercy...it sure reads like heaven
LOL
and this BEAUTIFUL poem (with NO CLICHES)LOL  
goes back to the top
Jamie
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Sorry JM-- See my reply to Maree, which is just below yours... I guess it wasn't very clear that the reference was to my reply to you..lol--- " you are allowed to say that in any language you choose"  (which of course is true )  

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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étourdissant
magnifique
parfait
enchanteur
exquis
Gentle Spirit
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This was so beautiful, so eloquent.  Wonderful write.  Softly smiling and dreaming over here now.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Jamie
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JM:  

Gentle Spirit: Thanks very much, I am glad you like it.  

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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11 posted 07-22-2001 05:21 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Magnifico
Bellissima
Carina



"little miss understood
little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~

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12 posted 07-22-2001 05:24 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

enjoy
Jamie
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vandana - glad you did, and thanks for reading it.

Maree - and i bet you didn't need a translator....heh

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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14 posted 07-25-2001 12:48 PM       View Profile for furlong   Email furlong   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for furlong

very nice jamie.

many very solid and compelling images, but for some reason the very first line is what grabs me. Simple, clear and yet evocative.

a near perfect first line in fact!

thanks

F
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15 posted 07-25-2001 03:19 PM       View Profile for Dulcinea   Email Dulcinea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dulcinea

This was very beautifully and sweetly written...I loved the title too, it says it all...  
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16 posted 07-25-2001 05:56 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

"Raindrops scattering tiny prisms
lend a surrealness to the scene
as the clear drops mottle the clouds.
Distance becomes less a matter of judgment
than of instinct,  time is bent by the music,
and memory becomes slanted by desire."


you are fueling my ache for rain......sigh....love this  
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17 posted 07-25-2001 06:33 PM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

Beautifully written Jamie..loved it.

          ~Victoria~

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

                                            Pablo Picasso

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excellent Jamie. . .

I love the wonderful images that you've used here. . . so warm and full of memories. . . a love that will never end. . .

thank you. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Elizabeth Santos
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19 posted 07-25-2001 07:44 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Beutifully written
I admire so much your poetic talents
And I would be so honored if I were the subject of this wonderful poem.
It would be safely kept in my heart
Superb!
Liz
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"Distance becomes less a matter of judgment
than of instinct,  time is bent by the music,
and memory becomes slanted by desire."

Jamie:  This is excellent poetry and so obvious with love...she and you are lucky two!
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21 posted 07-25-2001 11:18 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Jamie~

'When the time has come for season’s change
and for trees to again stand naked in the rain,
I will return to this place and think of you -'


This memory could not be written lovelier than you have done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                 noles1@totcon.com              

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22 posted 07-26-2001 04:44 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I remember driving back from Charlotte up into those hills and they were so beautiful...the mist, the green, the clouds - it was all so beautiful.

Thank you dear - for this and for you.

K

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Gee Furlong, I don't quite know what to say, 'cept maybe your reply was perfect as well....heh.. Thanks!  

Dulcinea: Thanks very much.

SEA: I could send you some, but we are still around 6" under for the year thus far. Thanks  

Victoria: Thanks for thinking so, and thanks for saying it as well.

Sven: No, Thank YOU  

Liz: Thanks ever so much your kindness...

Marge: Thanks, I had a great memory to work with.

K: Yes, you were...   Thanks dear

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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24 posted 07-31-2001 08:13 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You've written a perfect picture of a beautiful experience....I feel the love in here, Jamie.  
 
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