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Svankmajer's Alice (farewell post)

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brian madden
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0 posted 07-21-2001 03:27 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian madden

this thread in Feelings will explain my reasons

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Take care my fellow poets and friends.
----------------------
I am Alice,
     Ever-changing
Some days growing
Only then to  
Shrink!
the inflatable girl in plaster Paris
Words tumbling down the rabbit hole,
to quote myself "recessing, recessing more."

In autumn collage, you guided me
out of jabbering streets
to a quaint coffee shop.
We took our plastic trays
to our plastic table, ill-seated
with the roosting priests and nuns.
In such company
you confessed,
summer brought you love
wrapped in a swaying dress.
With those words,
our brew matured,
its milky swirls brushing
inertia from our lives,
as we abandoned the murky Side Gate…

In Bewleys,
We huddled where poetic icons
once penned moments out of history,
all the while sipping tea
and just talked
Of lucent nothings.
Wild hares unravelled to
Orient-Décor Transcending
as we trailed onto
the Queen George's Court
You sheltered me
from predatory advances
with their eyes pining
for the head of Alice
"Off with his head!" Now.

I am Alice,
   forever-treasuring
my friends. No,
I am not Alice!
for Alice forgot her wonderland
Through the Looking glass!
Poor Alice forever
without checkmate.



I am Dorothy,
Then
      Ever-Changing,
Subject in part to Uncle's schizophrenia,
I utter Geinsberg, "great minds gone to waste."

She burns a hit
of nicotine;
a sickly semi-pale
semi-freckled child
vomiting its venomous
odour. Even in the open street
I despise its musk
and all of its attachments.
Such is the nature of the addict
they never mean to insult,
and I should know,
kneeled over a shaved bone.
Touching from a distance
across generations,
bridging the gaps mid-sentence.
Curse my mule logic
It is nothing of value in
what matters
of the heart (?)
From the margin of maternity's
silence vow we know our the depths
of our bound, and that is enough for now.

At an early age I developed
"The Alice Syndrome"
My relationships had always been
fraught, establishing no connection
from my stay
in Primal education.
I left its dim lecture halls
in the role of the voyeur,  
the child always on the sidelines
of the playground and gym hall.
Then came college, It was the
catalyst key opening my cocoon.
I became Dorothy, commuting
from Kansas.  In the recluse carriage
you found me, "What have you hide?"
This question I would soon turn on you.
There was a happy ending
placed here, a smile a love blossoming
but words can kill, a simple "yes"
sours fondest memory.

I am Alice,
Once I pleaded
take to OZ,
take me to her arms.

I keep a leash
on my emotions
awaiting that phone call.
Still a creature of habit
I want to forget, just
wake up to reconnect,
but it is a foolish seed
I tried god I tried
to explain.
I don't see it as my fault,
I think I remained calm and open,
Still I am awaiting…….
Alice tumbling down,
This should have ended differently
I wrote verses for you
and now it is replaced
With this, all because of "yes".
Even if we never talk again
I ask that you don't fade to black

We slip into our silence,
uncertainty rules.
I am recessing.

I am Alice, ripped
at the heart.
I hate melodrama,
self pity rants
BUT I NEED TO SCREAM.
Farewell wonderland,
Oz seems lost!

I am Alice
now
Alone.

Recessing,
recessing ever more
                    e
                      e
                        e
                         .
                           .
                             .
© Copyright 2001 brian madden - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 07-21-2001 04:23 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

In such company
you confessed,
summer brought you love
wrapped in a swaying dress.
With those words,
our brew matured,
its milky swirls brushing
inertia from our lives,
as we abandoned the murky Side Gate…

In Bewleys,
We huddled where poetic icons
once penned moments out of history,
all the while sipping tea
and just talked
Of lucent nothings.
===========================

I keep a leash
on my emotions
awaiting that phone call.
Still a creature of habit
I want to forget, just
wake up to reconnect,
but it is a foolish seed
I tried god I tried
to explain.
I don't see it as my fault,
I think I remained calm and open,
Still I am awaiting…….
Alice tumbling down,
This should have ended differently
I wrote verses for you
and now it is replaced
With this, all because of "yes".
Even if we never talk again
I ask that you don't fade to black

We slip into our silence,
uncertainty rules.
I am recessing.

I am Alice, ripped
at the heart.
I hate melodrama,
self pity rants
BUT I NEED TO SCREAM.
Farewell wonderland,
Oz seems lost!
=========================


Much to ponder here Bri...
I am always taken back at the depth of self exploration and the sheer intelligence of your writings...
the imagery in this piece is impressive..
but its the passionate plea of emotions that strike me the most.
I'll be in touch.
me

only you could give love that satisfies the soul...
see the darkness of my heart and still won't let me go.

Sunshine
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2 posted 07-21-2001 07:28 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Oz is in our minds....

but I know where the yellow bricks are buried....

we're here...if and when....

when, soon....
catalinamoon
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3 posted 07-21-2001 09:14 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Brian this is so tumultuous, I'm sorry you are hurting. Stunning piece of work from it, but I hope the feeling of recessing passes soon.
Sandra
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4 posted 07-22-2001 05:07 AM       View Profile for Titia Geertman   Email Titia Geertman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Titia Geertman's Home Page   View IP for Titia Geertman

I hope we'll meet again some day
For you my dear have lots to say
Your pain inside has to be mend
For that it's courage I will send
I wish you the best with all my heart
And hope you'll find a fresh new start

So long Brian

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. [URL=http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/]http://communities.

Sven
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5 posted 07-23-2001 07:29 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

now this is why I'm sad to see you go. . . this is the most insightful work I've read from you. . .

it's a work that explains further the hurt that you've gone through. . . and what your heart has faced. . .

and it doesn't belong here on page 3!!  

we'll be here Brian. . . whenever you need us. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Martie
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6 posted 07-23-2001 07:45 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

brian--I don't know what to say...I am overwhelmed by the you in this poem...just, hugs for now.  Okay?

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 07-23-2001).]

Dark Angel
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7 posted 07-23-2001 08:35 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Brian, this is so emotive and passionate. A fantastic write. I am sorry you hurt, take care and hope to see you back real soon.

Hugs

Maree.

"little miss understood
little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~

Denise
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8 posted 07-23-2001 08:42 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Whatever it is that has broken your heart, I'm so sorry. You will be missed while you are gone. I hope you will find your way back very soon. (((HUGS)))
Mike
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9 posted 07-24-2001 12:57 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

you have to appreciate any work someone obviously spends a lot of effort on and puts a great deal of themselves into.  Enjoyed the read.
Interloper
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Deep in the heart


10 posted 07-25-2001 12:02 PM       View Profile for Interloper   Email Interloper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Interloper

I will miss a fellow poet from the old sod.  As has been previously said, we will be here for your return.
Voiceless
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11 posted 07-25-2001 04:22 PM       View Profile for Voiceless   Email Voiceless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Voiceless

A terrific poem,
excellent..
We will be awaiting your
return i hopes to read
some more of your great work.
Hopefully It will all work out.
Ba bye...

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

serenity blaze
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12 posted 07-26-2001 02:39 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I don't know what happened Brian...but I shall miss you and will rejoice upon your return.  

I love the allusions in this piece. But you do whatever you have to do to take care of YOU. HUGS.
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13 posted 01-20-2004 12:35 PM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

wishing
but failing
im sorry
passing shadows
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glad you didn't stay gone
 
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