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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
Storm Mystery twisted and convulsed overhead, Tendrils of black horror lashing out Threatening into the sky, Obfuscating the stars, and all remnants Of the hope once held. The dales were tattered and torn, The lips of Hell blowing Across a once grassy place. Icy fingers edged into his back, Chilling him to the soul, Filling him with a terror Beyond terror. The eyes of darkness surrounded him, Pierced him, stole at his mind. A scream grew from the canyons Of deepest agony as the sky Fell upon him. The gates of Darkness yawned And the teeth of the Lord of Twilight Glistened faintly, his laughter Rumbling through the Earth, Shaking bone from flesh, And flesh from soul. Searing pain and confusion Took him, hid him away under A black forever. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Wow, that's one powerful poem. You created some great imagery...very good write! I learned a new word!  obfuscating...~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mishtheelf, Good paint, enjoyed the work. |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
hehee!! I love that word! I try whenever I can to obfuscate my motives and work it in! Thanks Krista heheTed |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
woops! snuck in on me, seymour Guess your reply was obfuscated by my own low refresh rate. Thanks for the compliment!Ted |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Wow, I want to go hide under my bed! Very scary as in the Tornado I once survived! Nature has its way of showing a big ugly! You brought the storm out perfectly here. Thanks for your nice comments as well! Sincerely, Rwood |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
ye gads, and I hope he stays there! vivid!!! |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
Rwood~ Thanks! I'm glad to know it was as moving as I had hoped it would be It disturbed me quite a bit when I wrote it, just from imagination *L*Virginia~ Me too! Teddy |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
New word for me too -- thanks! This poem reads like ancient lore, perhaps from the likes of Lord Of The Rings or the memory of an old campaign through the caverns and mazes of D&D... very srong imagery, Ted. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This is EXCELLENT!! impressive vocabulary and detailed powerful imagery this is haunting, vivid, stark, and caliginously creative. A tempest blown in from the bowels of hell. very cool write. jm only you could give love that satisfies the soul... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
Mark~ You've unraveled my dark secret. I am indeed a D&D fanatic. You're welcome for the word, and thank you very much for the compliments.Janet~ High order praise! It is taken most appreciatively Vandana~ *bows* Thanks Teddy |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
a black forever.. *shivers* your writing is very creative Ted Lynne |
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