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RSWells
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0 posted 2001-07-21 12:52 PM



I dream't the dream
of what if yet again
and wept it seemed
forever without end,
Recurring woe
in stark vicinity
occuring slow
in dark infinity.

The only glow
on me, it's source unknown,
lonely shadow
seems a force I'm shown
to certify
the fact that I'm alone,
and clarify
exactly that Love's flown.

I'm paralyzed,
I'm muted, I'm undressed.
I've analyzed,
I've brooded and I've guessed.
So agonized,
deluded and depressed,
soliloquized,
concluded that it's best.

I've slept the sleep
of unknown, unnamed stars.
I've kept in deep
sine` qua non memoirs.
The lesson learned
in nightmares I attend,
la noir nocturne
plays solo dare depend.

I dream the dreams
of what if nevermore,
seems self esteem's
la motif evermore.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

© Copyright 2001 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
Paula Finn
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missouri
1 posted 2001-07-21 01:26 AM


So sad...all the what ifs...
Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-07-21 01:28 AM


I'm paralyzed,
I'm muted, I'm undressed.
I've analyzed,
I've brooded and I've guessed.
So agonized,
deluded and depressed,
soliloquized,
concluded that it's best.

I've slept the sleep
of unknown, unnamed stars.
I've kept in deep
sine` qua non memoirs.
The lesson learned
in nightmares I attend,
la noir nocturne
plays solo dare depend.

I dream the dreams
of what if nevermore,
seems self esteem's
la motif evermore.
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this is excellent...
this sates my craving for rhyme divinely...
very cool write...the inner rhyme is cleverly done..the vocabulary is employed masterfully.
Creative and clever turn of phrase.
had a Poe like quality to it as well.
well done poet sir, once again.
jm

only you could give love that satisfies the soul...
see the darkness of my heart and still won't let me go.

MARK V SHELDON
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3 posted 2001-07-21 02:31 PM


Rich and dense both in form and content. Enjoyed.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

Suetang
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4 posted 2001-07-21 05:53 PM


Such power was felt with your words and such sadness and emptiness.  I hope love finds you again very soon.  Take care......Sue

Suetang

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5 posted 2001-07-21 05:58 PM


*sigh* maybe the what ifs would have been worse. Wonderful writing.  

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams.
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rwood
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6 posted 2001-07-21 07:26 PM


I feel you need some rest my friend. Nightmare indeed. I'm sorry sleep has evoked this upon you. Hug your pillow dear Sir! And watch an old movie and crawl up with Oreo cookies and milk. I hope you will find your heart and sleep soundly once again. Thank you for a moving piece!
Sincerely,
Rwood

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7 posted 2001-07-22 05:37 AM


Richard, this was an excellent piece of work.  The rhyme was dead on, and of course you "walking dictionary" did it again with your wonderful vocabulary.  In other words, I loved it, and hope true loves comes to warm your soul soon (hugs)  

~ Give the heavens above more than just a passing glance ~And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance ~ I hope you dance. (Lee Ann Womack)

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