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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-07-20 04:13 PM


I am frozen.
Encased in the
Frigid facts,
with metabolism
So slowed by
The long exposure,
I can no longer
Rise from
Hibernation
To see new
Sun

Winter ends,
I know…
Or we simply
Learn to embrace
The temperature
And cope with
The day to day
To day to day
Of lessened light
And layers
Of protection
We must wear.

Living in Igloos
May be survival
But you have
No windows
To let in
Light


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-07-20 04:37 PM



Well, I started to pick a line, or two, that struck me, but it lead to another one, or two, that hit a little harder, until I had almost copied the whole thing....

so I guess all of it likes me, and very well, indeed....

thank you for this!

Snow
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2 posted 2001-07-20 04:38 PM


::::thudd::::
oh this one got me

sigh...  

snow

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

vlraynes
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3 posted 2001-07-20 04:41 PM



Cpat-
   Very 'cool'!  
   I like this alot!  

   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2001-07-20 04:49 PM


Sunshine: Pleased you enjoyed...

Snow: If that thud was you falling..I can understand how you might trip over the things I leave lying around..and will try much harder to be careful... ( smiling)
Thanks for the comment

VL... Cool? a play on pun? ( laughing)
Thanks for the comment!

MARK V SHELDON
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5 posted 2001-07-21 11:19 AM


...like a York Peppermint Patty, without the benefit of pleasure...  I've felt this way before, but never put it to such a unique perspective -- I enjoyed this, Ron, and always love how the titles of your poems or integral to their overall meaning.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

shadow974
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6 posted 2001-07-21 11:33 AM


I liked it much, here the gears grinding out what it means to me, their are so many different posiblities. I love poetry!!!

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

walker
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7 posted 2001-07-21 12:04 PM


Love this one.
VAS
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8 posted 2001-07-21 12:17 PM


in coming near August of this hemisphere, northern/western, it be hard to feel the cool of this, but if memory serves me, I think I've got it, you certainly did


my chicken's got it often, burger, too,
hope this feezer burn
soon lets go of you


frigid piece
ice think is good

brrrrrrrightly done!
ok
I'll stop
FREEZE!

Mishtheelf
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9 posted 2001-07-21 12:40 PM


My shoot-from-the-hip interpretation is one of the question of ignorance versus knowledge.  It strikes up a bit of a mental debate (which concluded quickly *L*) as to whether it would indeed be better to igloo oneself in from the light, and with it the cold, or to stand outside in the sun and let oneself feel the bitter bite as it comes.  I am perhaps too much of a curious person, I suppose, but I can't ignore the light when I know it's there.  

Enjoyed this quite a lot.  Thanks!

Ted

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