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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2001-07-20 03:47 PM



spinning

...there was a life
framed by the
curve of lips
... revealed through
the smile held within
her eyes

then loneliness
became the picture
staring back
from the
nakedness of
the stark white
walls...
and the only
sound in the
room is the
humming of
a distant fan
on the other
side of her
memory,
when a warm
body
laid there
covered in
the iridescent
glow of
passion,
clinging
to the teased
and tasted
flesh  and when
she placed her
fingers to
lips,  
frantically
searching for the
one thing she's
always been able
to give
you witnessed
a death upon
the lips of a
solitary shadow
spinning
the fan backwards

...there was a life
framed by the
curve of lips
... revealed through
the smile held within
her eyes

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-07-20 03:59 PM


wonderful!!!

This...I truly like!!!

Nice work!!!

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
2 posted 2001-07-20 04:02 PM


*VBS* <~ see that... Thank you for it!!!

Snow

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2001-07-20 04:53 PM


Very nice Snow...James
Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2001-07-20 05:42 PM


WOW Snow, this is a really beautiful peace you wrote. I like it very much, specially the form it's written in.


Titia

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Poeminister
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5 posted 2001-07-22 02:02 PM


Snow--Well expressed. Enjoyed this very much.


wayoutwalt
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6 posted 2001-07-24 12:50 PM


yuh the title fits the poem yuh very nice
Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
7 posted 2001-07-24 10:37 PM


thank you all for taking
the time to read and comment!

snow

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

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