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SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

0 posted 2001-07-20 02:48 PM

Surrounded by the golden glow
Of the swiftly setting sun
We prance in fields of tall grass
Smelling the flowers we pass
Looking for the white mass
That tells the day is done.

We come to the calm lake's surface
And reflect on this serene sight
Looking for the reflection
Of that circular perfection
But there is no detection
Of its magic on this night.

So we collect strewn pebbles
The flattest ones we can find
And toss them so that they skip
Each one doing a jump and flip
All ending with that final dip
Those rippling moments in time.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-07-20 02:58 PM

nice word play and images... I enjoyed!

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-07-20 03:00 PM

wonderfully playful and water play is one of the best kinds...enjoyed the rhyme scheme, too

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

3 posted 2001-07-20 03:01 PM

Excelent poem, skipping stones, it's been a long time.

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

4 posted 2001-07-20 03:02 PM

Cpat ~ I knew the reply was from you before I even went in to take a look

thank you always for your kind replies, they do so make me smile!

This was inspired by an evening I spent with my best friend. We wanted to photograph the moon's glow on the river near where we live but for some reason it was no where in sight! And it was supposed to be a full moon that night! Very strange!

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

5 posted 2001-07-20 03:04 PM

Oop, you two slipped in on me!

Vas ~ you've got that right! There's something magical about water...especially at night

Shadow ~ thank you! And you should do it again sometime

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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-07-20 04:40 PM

Sounds like fun...James

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2001-07-20 05:26 PM

SmittenKitten-
   Oh yes!  I do LOVE this one LOTS!!
   Wonderfully penned..

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

8 posted 2001-07-20 10:36 PM

Truly beautiful images here, incredibly written poetry. I loved the read.

~From a Krista to a Krista~

*Krista Knutson*

"Touched the mirror, broke the surface of the water,
Saw my true self, all illusions shattered..." ~Tracy Chapman

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

9 posted 2001-07-21 12:47 PM

James ~

doesn't it though? I love those simple pleasures.

Vicky ~ well! I'm flabbergasted

thank you!
Hugs back

Krista ~ coming from such a talented Krista, I am very honoured! Thanks!

(P.S. Isn't Tracy Chapman awesome?)

Mishtheelf
Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 68

10 posted 2001-07-21 11:47 AM

I agree with VAS, that's a very interesting rhyme scheme

I enjoyed skipping stones with you.

Ted

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

11 posted 2001-07-21 11:49 AM

Wow...great words as others stated...I was taken by these 2 lines especially.

Each one doing a jump and flip
All ending with that final dip

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

12 posted 2001-07-21 12:49 PM

Ted ~ hehe, I *just* figured out your name! MishTheElf...cute

Thanks for your comments and you can join my skipping anytime!

PoeticKnight ~ thanks!

It's always interesting to see what lines strike people in particular.
Thanks for the read and comments!

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

13 posted 2001-07-21 05:20 PM

Sounds like you've found your "Rome"... (refer to my archived poem, "ROMAN NIGHTS"). This line stood out for me: "Those rippling moments in time."
A magical portrait of a memorable place, you have here, Krista.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

14 posted 2001-07-22 12:49 PM

Mark ~ what a lovely poem you wrote

I believe I have found my "Rome".
Thank you for coming and sharing my magical place!

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

15 posted 2001-07-22 11:25 PM

this piece is very warm and calming--love it..

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

16 posted 2001-07-23 12:05 PM

Jamie ~ thanks so much

I'm glad you stopped by!

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