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Whispering Breeze
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Whispering Breeze |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
The whispering breeze is gone from me, not to be found, nor even to be. Never again to be the same, no longer there to call my name. Once it blew its gentle breath, now gone away to a certain death. Hills of green seem dry and bitter, sparkling creeks lost their glitter. The path ahead turned rocky and steep, land itself not even worth the keep. The moon is hidden behind a dark cloud, warmth of sun flees timid and cowed. How I wish to hear once again, a whispered name upon the wind. The breeze to curl around my face, one that will linger with saving grace. Rise up o’wind and ever blow, to come back to me with whisper slow. --------------------------------------------------No probs..gentle smile..Vikings brood once in a while |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The sense of loss...is audible. Well done! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Logan This was a stunning piece of writing, yet so very sad. I always enjoy reading your work. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh yes...haunting...yearning...beautiful |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
There is such a sense of loss in this poem...I'll blow a hug your way okay? It's not a whispered name, but it doesn't hurt!  This was such a beautiful write...I never knew sadness could be beautiful. But I have learned that here at Passions from talented poets such as yourself.Hugs, ~Krista |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
JLR, thank you for your comments. I appreciate you giving it a read..gentle smile Sue, very gentle smile, you are so kind with your words always..thank you so much for all your support. Ahh, Paula..your words are always so thoughtful and looked forward to..Thank you for being here..very gentle smile Krista, most gentle smile..What a very kind thing to offer, I gladly accept your gift and offer a hug back. Your words are so very touching to me, thank you |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Aww, so sad, but you wrote about it so beautifully! Sauni Sauni :) |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Warrior dear I am your wind, Cast across your cheek, A whisper seeking a friend. For when your mood casts you down, Here I am to bend your frown. Settle here and have a drink, Let us upon, some smiles, think. Look inside to see your heart, The moon does glow in every part. From the glint of your gentle smile, Travels a love no brood could defile. Take the hand now offered here, Of A Princess who holds you dear.  Of course you know I had to respond. Forgive my rough rhyme, but its all in the message, Sweet One! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hills of green seem dry and bitter, sparkling creeks lost their glitter. The path ahead turned rocky and steep, land itself not even worth the keep. The moon is hidden behind a dark cloud, warmth of sun flees timid and cowed. How I wish to hear once again, a whispered name upon the wind. The breeze to curl around my face, one that will linger with saving grace. Rise up o’wind and ever blow, to come back to me with whisper slow. =============================== and you brood beautifully gentle spirit of the wind. this is lovely in its bittersweet plea and longing. We need not always feel we have to write "happy",poetry has many moods...we write to release emotions and heal... release into the wind and gentle breezes will carry you... (something you would tell us, Im sure) (see we're learning from you) peace and poetry jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Beautifully sad write. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Agree with Interloper... beautifully sad... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
pure agony to lose all sense of emotion, but then could agony be felt, numbness, how could one describe it better than you have here it would surely be agony and despair but how could one sense without air may the breeze whisper your name again soon |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Logan~ Gentlest thoughts brought to mind I return to you in kind~ Softly emitting whispers of same Tenderly calling out your name~ Hope you hear me on the wind Calling out your name again~ Whispered thoughts to the Viking Hope you find it to your liking~ *You are wonderful ! Love ya'  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Logan if I did not know better, I would say you were a little depressed. You gave it a very good description. Glad it's just brooding. I do that a lot, too. Hugs Sandra |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Logan--I'm married to a viking and know all about those broods. You have written it very well! |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Logan, you have written a wonderful yet deeply sad poem. and I liked it much. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Just stop and breathe, my friend, look to the source of your inspiration... Cor |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
How I wish to hear once again, a whispered name upon the wind. The breeze to curl around my face, one that will linger with saving grace. Rise up o’wind and ever blow, to come back to me with whisper slow ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Haunting and yet beautiful. Deb |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, the Viking...the staid and stalwart of all... the one with the lonesome heart... the Herald of those that should know... the one that hates depart.... I hear.... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Logan, I suggest renting the movie "Office Space" to quickly change the mood and perspective. If you've ever, even for a brief moment in time, found yourself in an office environment, you will guffaw at this comedy... (just a suggestion) :-) But I did enjoy the flowing, somber emotion of your poem. I've seen through those eyes more than on one occasion... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Sauni, gentle smile, thank you for the read and your nice thoughts and comments Ahh, Gentle one..very gentle smile..how very sweet of you, as befits your nature..Thank you for all. I will treasure the write Janet Marie, you always strike me right at the core..you are delightful in your kindness..very gentle smile Interloper, thank you for the read and your nice comment..gentle smile Cpat..the same to you my friend..gentle smile VAS, thank you for your thoughtful thoughts, and kind words..I appreciate you being here..gentle smile Vandana..I am happy that you gave it a read, thank you..gentle smile Ahhh, Marge..what can I say, but thank you, for you know my words in spirit..You are a good friend...very gentle smile |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Sandra, very gentle smile, thank you for the read. The broods do hit, don't they?..Appreciate all your support Ahh, Martie, we do make you shake your head, don't we? Glad you knew what I was feeling...very gentle smile Shadow, thank you for being here and for the read and kind words. I am glad you enjoyed..gentle smile Ahh, Cor, I appreciate your advice and kind thoughts, my dear friend..very gentle smile Deb, gentle smile, thank you for being here, and for your thoughtful words Ahhhh, Sissie...very gentle smile...yes, you hear quite well indeed. Thank you for more reasons than one Mark, gentle smile, been there, done that, but appreciate the advice. Thanks for being here and giving it a read |
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