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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-07-19 03:41 PM


Sparkling…

Placid surface
Reflecting tree line
And sun

Belies the death
Lurking in its depth

To those not breathing
Such liquid form.

How does beauty
Such as yours
Not Hold menace
To all
who fall
Into the sea
Of your
Eyes?


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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-07-19 03:54 PM


CPatHair~
Wow !

Mesmerizing thoughts~
~*Marge*~

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missiechrissie
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2 posted 2001-07-19 03:57 PM


I love the undercurrents in this poem- excellent!
MARK V SHELDON
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3 posted 2001-07-19 04:23 PM


Reminds me (completely abstractly) of the lyrics to a traditional Russian folk song, "Dark Eyes", in terms of the mesmerization by the beauty and fear of the same "object of desire"...  Again, VERY powerful imagery here.  So, are you going to publish a book of your works, or what??  I claim dibs on the first signed copy. :-)

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

shadow974
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4 posted 2001-07-19 04:28 PM


interesting... The sea of your eyes. I want a copy of that best seller!!!

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

SmittenKitten
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5 posted 2001-07-19 04:31 PM


Yikes, those are some powerful eyes you're looking into!  
You write so well...I always love your imagery!
~Krista  

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6 posted 2001-07-19 04:32 PM


I felt an exaggerated nervousness out of this piece.  That exaggeration isn't necessarily unrealistic at all though, I have felt that irrational fear under the scrutiny of one I found beautiful.  Provocative work.
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7 posted 2001-07-19 05:18 PM


*sigh*.....love the imagery within.

Charisma

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8 posted 2001-07-19 06:46 PM


This is fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

"It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty

Kathleen

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