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quiet candle. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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*Thanks to Severn for the Challenge* quiet candle in evening’s eclipse prayer sent across plane of spirit asks solace for a single essence departed from its betrothed spherical melodies unite unseen forming in tessaracts of elemental purity untouched by tendrils of life passions flow through imagination souls dance across relativity to the lyre of celestial beings there, you and I cease to be we become the union of each other we enter and share one vessel quiet candle in evening’s eclipse star of love in galaxy of eons to you I pledge beyond this emotion betrothed, we know eternally ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
absolutely wonderful...you do say the most romantic, touching things to your sweetheart |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
You sweet talker you... Very nicely done Sven, always a pleasure to read your words |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
No matter how you say it, the moon always comes out so beautiful. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Awww...this is beautiful  ~Krista |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh how beautifully done sven.....love the way you weave with words such wonderful images. Charisma |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
prayer sent across plane of spirit asks solace for a single essence departed from its betrothed quiet candle in evening’s eclipse star of love in galaxy of eons to you I pledge beyond this emotion ================== Quite lovely and powerful imaginary.... It touched me........and made me wonder of the ending you had in mind..... Thank you *********************** |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Love this romantic side, you say it well. Sandra |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Sven, goodness, this is beautiful, My friend!You must teach me to write like that. Sauni Sauni :) |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
there, you and I cease to be we become the union of each other we enter and share one vessel Sven---You do what you do...so well! Amazing! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Yanno..This was a good challenge idea for you!  I believe you've done well with it. I enjoyed it at least!  Very different for you. Excellent. LOL! Did I mention its good?  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sven - ah my friend, you write very well... BC |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
WOW! That hit me between the eyes like Thor's hammer! You have outdone yourself my friend. Just awesome ... and I'm gonna steal it (naw, nobody would believe I wrote that wonderful piece) All Hail the great poet voice of the North! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thanks to everyone. . . Severn's challenge was to write a poem "using no colour imagery at all...but expressing an emotion.." I took that a little beyond with this, and tried to write a poem that had little or no visual references at all. . . the idea of two loves, two hearts, separated, but still reaching out, still joining, still loving, even through time and storms. . . hopefully, I've done that here. . . VAS, thank you. . . if only there was one to listen to them. . . Capt Hair, thank you my friend, always nice to see that you enjoy my work. . . into2B, it does, doesn't it??? thank you. . . SmittenKitten, thank you so much!!! Charisma, so, that means I'm getting better right?? Thank you my friend. . . Enchanted Melody, I really don't know what kind of ending I'd like to see. . . perhaps time will tell. . . thank you. . . Sandra, I've always had this side. . . it just comes out more around here. . . Saunni, I have to teach you how to write like this??  Only if you show me how to write like you my friend. . . thank you. . .JLR, thank you. . . glad that you enjoyed. . . Temptress, no. . . you didn't mention that it's good. . .  . . . lol. . . thank you so much!!!BC, thank you Sir, high praise coming from you. . . Interloper, well Voice of the Southland, I'm sure that we could make a trade. . . but, I'm sure that no one would believe that I could write like you. . . vandana, thank you my friend!! ---------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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