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Interloper
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Deep in the heart

0 posted 2001-07-30 07:05 PM




The great three-masted schooner ran before the wind
easily carving through the heavy running sea.
This man, his stubborn words unwilling to rescind,
his salty pride refusing to hear his heart’s plea,

rushes his retreat from a woman's love again,
fleeing upon his first love, always faithful ship.
Thinking distance is needed from the why and when
yet thoughts clear with each comfortable sway and dip.

Breathing in the familiar fragrance of sea air,
his mind grapneling with the dilemma of love,
his pride bows to the knowing, his heart remains where
she is waiting, and he turns in direction of

his love, his heart, and his home port.  Come about mates,
pile on the sail, we're headed where my true love waits.



© Copyright 2001 The Tall Texan aka Doctor Love - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2001-07-30 07:13 PM


Hey, you two, this was great!!  Applause!!
cpalmer
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2 posted 2001-07-30 07:18 PM


Bravo! You two did a great job! I love this...make my heart all warm and fuzzy!
hugs
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

shadow974
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3 posted 2001-07-30 07:22 PM


Exceptional piece, nice work.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

Honeybee
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4 posted 2001-07-30 08:12 PM



  You make sonnets look easy, and I know that they can be very difficult.  What a lovely, cadence-kissed duet...

Melissa~

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 07-30-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-07-30 08:17 PM


Very nice, you two did this well.
Enjoyed the flow and the meaning behind it.
Sandra

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6 posted 2001-07-30 10:34 PM


Lovely write you two    it flows like the waves of the sea trickling onto the shoreline...very beautiful.
~Krista  

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7 posted 2001-07-30 10:56 PM


Nicly rippled you two!

Reel beauty is only fin deep!

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8 posted 2001-07-31 03:55 AM


SEA~ and InterLoper~
What a lovely sail you've set~
Very nicely done~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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9 posted 2001-07-31 12:20 PM


I wanted to tell you all thank you  
and Interloper.....thank you.....I've always wanted to do a sonnet, and you've shown me I can.....you are wonderful!!  

[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 07-31-2001).]

illusion
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10 posted 2001-07-31 01:16 PM


The entire poem is beautiful, but I really love this line "and he turns in direction of his love, his heart, and his home port." I like that compass reading.   Well written.
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Deep in the heart
11 posted 2001-07-31 01:34 PM


Martie ~ Applause from you is highly valued approbation indeed.

Cindi ~ I thought your heart was always warm a fuzzy.  If we made it warmer and fuzzier, then we are happy

Shadow ~ High praise indeed.  Thank you

Melissa ~ The only kisses I get from SEA are via Email.  Besides, her husband is too big for me to get foolish

Sandra ~ Thank you so much

Krista ~ What a lovely comment.  Might be a poem in those words

Mysteria ~ We didn't have a drop to drink!  

Marge ~ Yup, a spinnaker with Passions embossed thereon

SEA ~ I wish to join you in thanking everyone here at Passions.  You can do whatever you put your mind to doing

illusion ~ You chose words that we both wrote.  I won't tell you who wrote what 'cause I think the symbiotic nature makes it all work to paint a word picture for you to enjoy.

Love, joy, and peace to you all

Finally fixed :)
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vandana
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12 posted 2001-08-01 10:39 AM


enjoy
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13 posted 2001-08-01 10:59 AM


Wait!  You forgot the most important, utterly romantic part of the entire thing..the lighthouse!!!!


" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kathleen


SEA
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14 posted 2001-08-01 10:27 PM


......that's where she waits......
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