Open Poetry #15 |
Where my true love waits . . . A sonnet duet with SEA |
Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
The great three-masted schooner ran before the wind easily carving through the heavy running sea. This man, his stubborn words unwilling to rescind, his salty pride refusing to hear his heart’s plea, rushes his retreat from a woman's love again, fleeing upon his first love, always faithful ship. Thinking distance is needed from the why and when yet thoughts clear with each comfortable sway and dip. Breathing in the familiar fragrance of sea air, his mind grapneling with the dilemma of love, his pride bows to the knowing, his heart remains where she is waiting, and he turns in direction of his love, his heart, and his home port. Come about mates, pile on the sail, we're headed where my true love waits. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey, you two, this was great!! Applause!! |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Bravo! You two did a great job! I love this...make my heart all warm and fuzzy! hugs Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Exceptional piece, nice work. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
You make sonnets look easy, and I know that they can be very difficult. What a lovely, cadence-kissed duet... Melissa~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 07-30-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very nice, you two did this well. Enjoyed the flow and the meaning behind it. Sandra |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Lovely write you two it flows like the waves of the sea trickling onto the shoreline...very beautiful. ~Krista |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Nicly rippled you two! Reel beauty is only fin deep! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ and InterLoper~ What a lovely sail you've set~ Very nicely done~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I wanted to tell you all thank you and Interloper.....thank you.....I've always wanted to do a sonnet, and you've shown me I can.....you are wonderful!! [This message has been edited by SEA (edited 07-31-2001).] |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
The entire poem is beautiful, but I really love this line "and he turns in direction of his love, his heart, and his home port." I like that compass reading. Well written. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Martie ~ Applause from you is highly valued approbation indeed. Cindi ~ I thought your heart was always warm a fuzzy. If we made it warmer and fuzzier, then we are happy Shadow ~ High praise indeed. Thank you Melissa ~ The only kisses I get from SEA are via Email. Besides, her husband is too big for me to get foolish Sandra ~ Thank you so much Krista ~ What a lovely comment. Might be a poem in those words Mysteria ~ We didn't have a drop to drink! Marge ~ Yup, a spinnaker with Passions embossed thereon SEA ~ I wish to join you in thanking everyone here at Passions. You can do whatever you put your mind to doing illusion ~ You chose words that we both wrote. I won't tell you who wrote what 'cause I think the symbiotic nature makes it all work to paint a word picture for you to enjoy. Love, joy, and peace to you all Finally fixed :) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Wait! You forgot the most important, utterly romantic part of the entire thing..the lighthouse!!!! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
......that's where she waits...... |
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