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a little like me
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a little like me |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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There was no love at first sight between you and me we were never destined to be. We met with fingers extended reaching beyond our grief- when no medical knowledge could keep your first love from slipping beyond your touch- you were hopeless and lost. And me-I grieved for me- my hatred and I once gladly lay six feet under- but I now found it a burial with far too high a cost. I thought I saw in you a friend a little like me. Glossies of me brought you smiles and your charm returned them to me ten fold. We were as different as black and white, my world was Laundromats, puppies and cleaning little chocolated faces and you clung to the ladder right smack in the middle of Corporate America, still I warmed to find a friend- someone bumping through life…. searching, and yes somehow a little like me. We opened our souls to loves lost, both laughter and pain were abundant. We looked for laughter to wash clean the pain. And we talked…. we needed to talk for histories sake and for the future. You were an anchor in my storm, you were somewhere safe for me to be. When you too opened your deepest pain and loneliness I knew you were more than a little like me. Its been many months since we have talked my friend and I finally stopped counting. I had thought you and I would always be best friends, but considering the whys and wherefores that brought us together I will have to say that for you it is a good thing you don't need me anymore. I know I still send you smiles now and then but have you noticed that I have started to add …no need to reply... I don't do it to make you feel less guilty, I do it so that I can stop waiting. Some day soon, I too will stop writing as every day I become a little more like you. |
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Jeen Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 91 |
I am usually not one to read long poetry. It takes great content and imagery to keep me there stanza after stanza. This poem had it all for me, with the final stanza tieing up the content wonderfully. I am no critique, but I loved it. Jeen |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
insightful... and the history presented perhaps painful yet also..one of growth. Very nicely told.. a pleasure indeed to read |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jellybean, One of your better writes, enjoyed |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this so profoundly touched me, all others have said above, I do echo, the culminating wisdom that you've attained and shared...SUPERB! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all......this one was hard to write...started it weeks ago and just couldn't find an ending that suited me and my muse.....am really glad you enjoyed  |
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