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Twenty or Less...#9 |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
(Now that I've posted most of my older poetry and lyrics, I'm ready to dive into some fresh writing and thoughts. Since my style tends to be lengthy and very strict form and rhyme, I'm going to try something a little different for me: a new series of poems that I'll call "TWENTY OR LESS..." implying that each will consist of twenty or less words, in free-form style, with the intent of letting the words conjure up subjective impressions and definitions for my readers -- let the previous boundaries of style and form evaporate, for a while, and let's see what your impressions are... Enjoy! -MVS) ======================================== Delicate clutching fists Offering exclamations from childhood Silence defines awareness Through unspoken sound Reluctantly clinging to Bridges of trust (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
You my friend are developing quite a way with these... this one even more layered and complex than the others says a great deal with a few words... I look forward to your next in the series..as I have enjoyed them all...and the evolution of thought... A suggestion... now that this "form" has had some play..try altering it so the read and the rythm also add to the meaning. shorter lines or breaks on single words to create a pause..or accentuate the meaning. Love what you have done... |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I've noticed even as your fist grows the cling remains... softly echoing the Captain...you do have a way with these.... wouldn't mind you losing the preface, however... the poems stand alone... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sounds to me like an attempt to overcome past hurts. With undercurrents of other things I am unsure of. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ron, thank you for your words of encouragement. You have a good point regarding format -- I'll give it a try! My Lady: That verse is potent! I like it. I suppose you have a point regarding the preface, now; I just wanted my readers to be aware, but they probably are by now, so, ok -- the preface goes! Sandra, I think you have an accurate interpretation, though of course, there can be numerous others, depending on the reader's frame-of-mind... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
What this conjures for me is a hodgepodge of memories of my stepfather, and my anger and pain related to him. I don't want to get very specific on this forum about such personal matters, but suffice it to say that this very definately strikes a subjective ghost from my past into view. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, A ghostly ride through a forest of symbols. Enjoyed |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Mishtheelf, I find it fascinating how minimal words, in the right order, can mean so many different things for different people. I'm sorry if this poem brings back unpleasantries for you, but this is a working example of what I mean when I say that this series of poems is, in effect, a "literary Rorschach Test"... So it seems, Sy... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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