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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
crystal eyes do then realize that I would go a bit beyond surmise that I would fill you a little more with surprise if you would look beyond to my crystal eyes do not think that you would ever find lies nor that I would ever begin your demise but you would find a harbor between these sighs if you were to believe in my crystal eyes if you were to trust in my realize then gain a great hold in my apprise by simply looking deep into my crystal eyes where I hold your heart and never a goodbye ah yes your love belongs here in my crystal eyes behold the shimmer of faceted rainbows seen, crystallized here in my crystal eyes realize your surprise and take comfort in my idolize of you, my love, beneath these blue skies your love is found in sweetened highs and in the depths of crystal eyes |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
and I an sighing after reading this. wow what rhyming here, loved this |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
behold crystal orbs seek the future there within shall we not then share Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very tender.. very romantic... Nicely done and a pleasure to read |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LadyInWhite~ Just pretty gosh darned gorgeous ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lady, This is very pretty and a tender invitation to he that would trust to look into those cystal eyes. Nice work! Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
You tease! We cannot see those crystal eyes! And there is so much there... The magic mirror, the willing window... \\ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
through crystal eyes we can see right through to the soul of love excellent. . . wonderfully flowing and delicate. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I liked this, IF I were critiquing it, I would have to say I believed the word "crystal" was used too many times, it's a delicate word, one that evokes images...anyway, I liked the piece..  "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I like this, the only trouble is if I look into your crystal eyes,,,I might just get lost in them.... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, this flowed so smoothly. Well done. All writing comes |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I second that "Wow!" There's an excellent rhyme scheme here with lovely sentiment. This is going into my library, well done! Melissa~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
but you would find a harbor between these sighs if you were to believe in my crystal eyes if you were to trust in my realize ====================== clever rhyme scheme Lady... and lovely blending of imagery and emotions. So sweetly romantic as well... must be nice to be be so inspired  well done poetess of the white sighs jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah, look at all of your kind words and responses.... I only wish I had a bit of time to say thank you individually.... but do know you have all continued to touch my heart....thank you! |
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