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Bough Before me!
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Bough Before me! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
(FRESH off the press this morning, inspired as I'm walking my dog, observing something that hits home for me...) For many years, I've stood my ground Providing for your needs... But in a heart where no love's found, Another surely bleeds. Today found me with stark surprise, For never had I thought Your evening call hear my demise My care for you had brought And mourning's glory doves will cry As steel teeth shred my would From you not so much as a sigh To fill the ground I stood. (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
enjoyed reading this one, mark.. funny how things hit us at the oddest moments, aye.. hugs, g "sometimes when youre hurrying too much to see whats for tomorrow, you miss whats for today.." -demi moore |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This is a tender rendering of finding one's peace, no matter the cost, and pulling back up to say - hey, it takes two - and then... facing the wind, and going forward... well done Sir.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
From you not so much as a sigh To fill the ground I stood excellent image and play on words... this shines in the poem..and the poem itself shines quite well.. Enjoyed! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, Enjoyed the read. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
"not so much as a sigh" Hard to believe some days, isn't it. Nice write though. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thanks, everyone for your feedback and interesting interpretations... I'm curious, however, if anyone got the subject of the poem...? I wrote this from the point of view of a beautiful tree which I have passed daily on my walks with my dog -- a tree that seemed to do no damage or harm to anyone but only provided shade, beauty, peace, and a home for squirrels and birds -- a tree which this morning was being hacked to bits by chainsaws and then shredded through a nightmare of a machine by men who seemed to be oblivious as to what exactly they were doing other than their job... This REALLY gets to me when I see nature desacrated for no apparent reason, simply to satisfy the whim of a person/people, so, feeling the "spiritual pain", if you will, I wrote this as the personna of the tree, speaking to the property owner/mankind who up until this time, seemed to conveniently take from the tree's shade and beauty and in return gave it murder. A little too passionate? Maybe. But such are my feelings. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mark, never TOO passionate. I agree with you, though I did not see that in here till you explained. A few years ago at work I watched someone cut down about 10 gorgeous trees for no reason except to make a little more space in his already too large yard! Have you read "The giving tree"? Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But in a heart where no love's found, Another surely bleeds. Today found me with stark surprise, For never had I thought Your evening call hear my demise My care for you had brought ================================== I read your reply about the poems intend.. and while I noticed and wondered the spelling and word play in the title... I didnt catch the perspective of a tree... but I loved the poetic phrasing and the passionate plea in this... I thought it was spoken from the view of a dying relationship... tree or person..the poem is lovely. jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Mark, I did not get the meaning that you mentioned... but, poetry to me is what the reader gets from it. This piece had a sense of being serious and filled with much passion and caring. It flowed with such elegance and rhythm. No matter who reads it will find in it what they need to fill their needs.... I loved it!   ((~.~)) |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Sandra, actions like this churn me. I haven't read this... is this a book, short story, poem...? JM, thank you. I guess the metaphors were more subtle objectively than in my subjective passion... Thank you, Flutterwings, for your kind words -- I hope the readers will leave with something to think about... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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