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Beams - haiku/senryu |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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BEAMS As it appears bit hard to read here are the lines: took ages to grow in a second split to beams death of a big tree waiting for transport new destination in sight forgotten it's roots please do not forget to plant new ones instead or earth will be bold A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/ [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 07-17-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Yes, Titia, we MUST replentish our forests. Well done, if a little hard to read  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Yes the text is not as clearly as I thought it would be. Don't know why. Thank you for focusing  anyway.Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Thanks for re-writing your verse seperately so I could read it better.... These were very good and I liked the double meaning of roots as in location or life support. I believe in the circle of life, trees have some effect/affect on our roots as well. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice.... I enjoyed the messages and the form... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this is very nice, I understood and enjoyed this, save for the last line...I don't understand the earth being 'bold' if the trees are replenished, could you help? |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thanks to you all my friends for reading. VAS, oh my did I used the wrong word here? I ment, that if we don't plant trees back the earth will look like a ....what shall I say...the skull of a man without hair? I thought bold was the word for that look. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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