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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2001-07-17 01:58 PM


Someone Kiss Her For Me

Life goes round and round
like a merry go round.
You take a ride when you can.
You hold life in your hand.
Life laughs and understands.
You take a ride when you can.

You laugh and you play.
These are fun filled days.
You laugh and you play.
You live some fun filled days.

Til the merry go round
no more goes around.
It sends you on your way.
No more fun filled days.
Life sends you on your way.

Now the fun is done.
Life has gone away.
She doesn't want to play.
No more fun filled days.
She has gone away.

She's living by the sea.
Down in Waikiki.
Someone kiss her for me.
I miss her terribly.
Someone kiss her for me.
I'm fine now I'm free.
Someone kiss her for me.

Jameslee@July17,2001


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1 posted 2001-07-17 02:11 PM


nicely done.. like the form..and the way it rolls across my mind when I read it..

I enjoyed!

Lady In White
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2 posted 2001-07-17 02:13 PM



Haunting...sad....you are free....and not.

A good write, James...

you speak your heart well...

Paula Finn
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3 posted 2001-07-17 02:19 PM


Oh James....honey...this is just so sad...hugs to you sweet friend
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-07-17 09:25 PM


JamesMichael~
Just how tender is this ????
V E R Y !

'She's living by the sea.
Down in Waikiki.
Someone kiss her for me.
I miss her terribly.'


Awwwwww !  I just love it.
~*Marge*~

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ThUnDeRkYsS
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5 posted 2001-07-17 10:41 PM


Very nicely done, like the flow of this as well as the feelings portraited in a way that shows you are doing fine.

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Saunni
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6 posted 2001-07-17 11:01 PM


Aww, James, this is sad. You write from so much love. Hope she comes back. I see you are from Hawaii...I always wanted to go there!

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

VAS
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7 posted 2001-07-17 11:26 PM


yes, sad, part of me thinks it's a woman that's let your life, and yet some of me thinks it's life that's left it...then again, maybe 'she' was your life and without her, no life remains

so many facets to this piece and I think it really doesn't need defining, cuz the facets add to its mystery/intrigue


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