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Waiting For My Heart

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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 07-17-2001 09:34 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Cpat Hair

The night passed
On slopes gradin side
In colors grey

Moon’s face
Had in gradual way
Made its path
Across starlit sky
Turning black
To less
And moving shadows
In circular dance

I observed this
While waiting
For my heart
To find me
And once again
Beat in this chest

I observed this
But could not feel
For you took that
With you when
You left

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1 posted 07-17-2001 09:37 AM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

profound wanting, aching here

powerful!
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 07-17-2001 09:40 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Cpat Hair,
Interesting, enjoyed the read.
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Deep in the heart


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heart taken away
will find it's way home again
feelings shall return
Lady In White
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4 posted 07-17-2001 11:04 AM       View Profile for Lady In White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady In White


what a lovely use of verbiage...it sets the whole scene, and the images then bring one in to see the longing left behind...

well done Sir...a beautiful write...
MARK V SHELDON
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I especially like the imagery here:

Moon’s face
Had in gradual way
Made its path
Across starlit sky
Turning black
To less
And moving shadows
In circular dance

You provide a vivid set-up for the punchline at the end.  Powerful emotions represented here.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

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6 posted 07-17-2001 11:50 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Thanks all!!!

The poem was written with a little help from a friend... and it is greatly appreciated.

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 07-17-2001).]

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I observed this
While waiting
For my heart
To find me
And once again
Beat in this chest

====================

Your heart would beat again
forgetting all memory of past pain.

An enjoyable touching read with a somewhat haunting touch.......

Thank you
****************************



ThUnDeRkYsS
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8 posted 07-17-2001 11:14 PM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

Funny how they do that, isnt it??  Nice write my friend.

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.


Suetang
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9 posted 07-17-2001 11:21 PM       View Profile for Suetang   Email Suetang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suetang

This was so hauntingly sad but so beautifully written.  Take care....Sue

Suetang

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10 posted 10-26-2001 07:18 PM       View Profile for Tiersdin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tiersdin

beatiful, beautiful, beautiful!

~Tier
Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 10-25-2006 01:38 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

and I remember when Ron walked among us giving us little gifts of words...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

 
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