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Tiersdin
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0 posted 2001-07-16 10:22 PM



I'd started out as a whisper
your whisper
elusive, so breathe
sprout gossamer wings
to carry you away
falling, soft like snow
lips pressed together
blow, a kiss
try to catch it
but you can't
because it's gone
in a sigh
so like me...

~Tier
7/01

© Copyright 2001 R.T. Webster-Mosby - All Rights Reserved
Honeybee
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1 posted 2001-07-16 10:25 PM



You know, I really love the way you write of a moment in your poems, you expressed yourself well in this, well done!

Melissa~

Logan
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2 posted 2001-07-16 10:29 PM


Ahh, geez, Tier, how compelling to thoughts that was. Very nice read..Thank you...very gentle smile
Saunni
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3 posted 2001-07-16 10:48 PM


Hey,this is cool. I love this!  

Sauni

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Mike
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4 posted 2001-07-16 11:13 PM


very nice, enjoyed the style much.  I always read a poem out loud, this reads wonderfully.
(especially in a whisper)

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5 posted 2001-07-16 11:31 PM


Great write, Tier...love the style...I enjoyed it very much!

sp  

it was love that first drew me,
it is love that will keep me here...
now I see love burning brightly
when everything else is unclear...

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6 posted 2001-07-16 11:38 PM


Tiersdin~
I'm with Mike ... this reads beautifully in a whisper.
Lovely thoughts.
~*Marge*~

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JLR
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7 posted 2001-07-17 02:19 AM


I will agree with Melissa.  You can take moments from time...and live them in words that when I read them, I live also.  
MyEnchanted_Melody
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8 posted 2001-07-17 02:54 AM




I'd started out as a whisper
your whisper
=============

I loved the openeing lines sooooo much .....and Mike and Marge are right.....
One can whisper it wonderfully......

Thank you
**************************

It's only me.......only me
I hope that would suffice eternally

{{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}}

JamesMichael
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9 posted 2001-07-17 04:09 AM


Very nice...James
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10 posted 2001-07-17 07:51 AM


well now RT... I certainly hope you are not gone...

as usual you capture well the moment and the feel... love to read your words..

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Deep in the heart
11 posted 2001-07-17 09:47 AM


to catch a soft sigh
to receive the blown kisses
just open your heart

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


VAS
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12 posted 2001-07-17 09:50 AM


oh my
it's gone
in a sigh

what a gentle, yet powerful image here


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13 posted 2001-07-17 09:56 AM


Soft.
Sven
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14 posted 2001-07-17 07:31 PM


I would say that you are far more than a sigh my friend. . .

this is wonderful. . . truly delicate. . . another from the "Queen of Romance". . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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