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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Disgust Melissa P. Monette ~ Lying in the rupture of a heart bleeding rust dawn refuses to free darkness, quill sits with disgust next to the remnants of meager words...victimized by paper and pen seeking cleansing redemption, lines which yearned to mend poured out through liquid ink of pain into rhyme and verse this so-called healing expression now becomes my curse enslaving me to the jaded course of destiny and of fate no lasting kinship in this lifetime, relinquished of a soulmate, but, one can only weep and mourn stolen innocence for so long soon the sound of sorrow becomes an overplayed song so I make my peace with the realization that I am nothing those who have no worth need not mind woe's meandering, too many dreams have been lost, even God cannot save me now to love myself festered with flaws - I'll never know how yet, I ask not for pity or for your tiresome charade of tears untainted arms inflict my core more with your gloating of uncrucified years for, daylight cannot penetrate darkness as I wallow in disgust for this leper soul, for unwritten poetry encased in dust ~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nice work... can't believe no one has commented on it.. I enjoyed this a great deal.. nice sound and language use to paint your message.. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
 YES! You know, this was powerful. Geesh..thats not even good enough to describe it! Your ending was just wonderful too! I'm a sucker for good endings for sure!  Love this, Honeybee! |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Much sadness encased in this quilled message of hopelessness. The darkness never lasts forever... and the light is always very dim in disgust. But, if you go within, there is a message between the lines of this great work of art that says so much more. The dust will settle and the beauty shines. You are one talented poet with much hurt well expressed. I can relate!  ((~.~)) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice expression of disgust...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You do write the dark powerfully Melissa...I enjoyed this much... "unwritten poetry encased in dust.." very vivid... (pssst....and thanks again for your kindness...  ) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Melissa, Melissa, Melissa!!!Please tell me that this was not spurned from your personal feelings, please tell me nothing has happened in your life to render such pain and darkness. Please tell me you only put these clothes on in order to understand one who has such. If this is not artistic endeavor, please e-mail me. I want to 'listen.' |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Melissa. . . I'm going to start calling you the "Poet of the Dark" if you keep pulling up these images. . . The power of these words just jumps right off the page at you. . . you make us feel the despair and disgust of the speaker at the loss of the heart. . . wow. . . you're really reaching deep my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Excelent work, dark dispare, I hope those poems come to light. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
Superb! Very powerful writing here! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
well, if it was written from a true feeling, dry those tears and remember no one is going to take care of YOU like you can do...sometimes we just have to draw on that inner strength, God, this was deep. " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
quill sits with disgust next to the remnants of meager words...victimized by paper and pen seeking cleansing redemption, lines which yearned to mend poured out through liquid ink of pain into rhyme and verse this so-called healing expression now becomes my curse enslaving me to the jaded course of destiny and of fate no lasting kinship in this lifetime, relinquished of a soulmate, but, one can only weep and mourn stolen innocence for so long soon the sound of sorrow becomes an overplayed song ============= I really loved it...... A wonderful eloquent and touching expression...... I found myself captured by many lines..... Thank you indeed...... *************************** |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I love it, I'm sorry if you truly have this utterly discouraged feeling. But you are a fine poet, and expressed these thoughts well. Sandra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Melissa--much emotional power in this very well written poem. You write it with such real feeling that it feels real, though I hope not you. |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
I've been in that place you describe--You painted it very well with dark colors and vivid images. I hope you wrote from memory though. Sadness shouldn't last too long. I send smiles! |
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