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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-07-16 01:48 PM


It was hot
98 degrees and humid
when Iambe stopped
and looked up,
wiping the sweat
with an old rag
she carried in her
hip pocket,
along with a folding knife.

She’d been working
All morning on Ted’s
International, trying to
Fix the carb which was
Touchy to say the least
And fickle to explain.

I had just pulled in
And was unloading my gear,
But she didn’t stop for me,
It was the heat…

I offered her a cold soda
From my cooler
Which she accepted with out
A word,
Opened,
And poured down
Her throat like she was
Pouring oil in a crankcase.

Mopping her face again
She looked at me with those
Brown eyes of hers
That could melt steel or my heart
And simply said
“River?”

I spent the rest of the day
Soaking in naked delight
As her currents washed
over me and I
enjoyed the view



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Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-07-16 02:30 PM



The visuals here should be a delight for all to read....

the play on words?  Excellence in motion....

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2 posted 2001-07-16 02:36 PM


I did enjoy this...the slow unfolding of the visuals was almost cinema like--but confess I wouldn't mind if you explained this one to me, as I feel as though there is something I don't quite "get". (My brain is running on empty again today, so humor me?)  
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3 posted 2001-07-16 02:37 PM


What a way to beat the heat ... of the day, you rascal
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4 posted 2001-07-16 02:48 PM


Deca.. you are too kind..

Serinity... the whole series of Iambe "stories" are built on a figment of some writers imagination... they are intended to develop a character..and express some insight into human nature. Iambe is a composite of several people I have known..and she is independent, self assured, with no putting on of airs..a woman sho knows what she wants, and does what she feels... rejecting in many ways the mold women are so often tried to change to fit...
this poem was intended primarily to show that now matter how little in the day to day one might show affection or outward caring..they will with the right motivation and in the right circumstances..become a part of something initmate at which time, a closer understanding and bonding is achieved... it also is meant to show that men too..have a romantic side and may be indeed the "softer" of the pair in some cases. Role reversal in short... two unique characters I was "given" by another poet...
and mine to give away should any other poet get enamored with Iambe as I am....and ask...
she belongs to no one, but herself... and all I can do is hold for a while the eessence of her.. ( damn..I talk too much)

INterloper.. yes it would be a wonderful way to pass a summer's day would it not..

thanks all for the comments..


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5 posted 2001-07-16 04:20 PM


Cpat--I don't want to write her, no, there are some times that I would like to be her. Enjoyed this!
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6 posted 2001-07-16 05:46 PM


Martie: I think you probably are her in some ways...and no one is her in all ways...
You would however... probably write her well... adding a dimension I can't.

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7 posted 2001-07-17 01:44 PM


River?  Beach?  Mountains?   Sounds like a blast...James
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8 posted 2002-09-26 01:54 PM


Excellent work again, Ron. I love how she goes all river-y.
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