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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2001-07-16 12:31 PM


A wine glass,
Surprise shattering, it breaks,
Blood red stain,
Demise emotions, it makes.

Break demise,
Rendering backwards, in thought,
Blotting dry,
Scattering a way to naught.

Shards surprise,
Thinking as doing, grabs pain,
New wetting,
Bleeding and crying, add stain.

Giving up,
The memories stay, reminds,
Underneath,
A small remnant square, there finds.

Gloom


© Copyright 2001 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-07-16 01:50 PM


Cool write! Love the play of image and words...
Irish Rose
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2 posted 2001-07-16 08:22 PM


very, very intriguing message here, Professor, I compliment you!

"It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty

Kathleen

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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3 posted 2001-07-16 08:24 PM


Professor Gloom
I love the way you weave your words and I loved this piece of writing.  Take care...Sue

Suetang

Temptress
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4 posted 2001-07-16 09:49 PM


I like the thoughtfulness of this a lot. You know, you write like someone I read once long ago.
Professor Gloom
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of Depression
5 posted 2001-07-17 05:09 AM


Thank you, Cpat Hair,
I am pleased you enjoy the way
My word play with the images.

Thank you, Irish Rose,
There’s a message here ?
And I just thought I was explain the reason
For the throw rug,
Glad you liked.

Thank you, Suetang,
Your words are very kind.

Thank you, Temptress,
I do tend to put emphases on the structure,
Unlike many of the modern writers and
I am rather an old writer and appreciate your kind words.

Gloom

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2001-07-17 10:31 AM


Supremely captivating poem.
Sandra

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