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El Diablo
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El Diablo |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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El Diablo Who knew I had prognostic powers? I just happened to mention the dream - smoke arching across Highway 50, flames surrounding the buildings where I work with two thousand others. It wasn’t difficult to imagine, these serene hills may mimic soft wheat, but nothing burns like dried grasses in western summers. When the wind shifts, circles from the north, they call it El Diablo - a devil's furnace, fuel for pyromaniacs and nincompoops who toss cigarette butts out car windows. And we can’t really blame the local farmer who didn’t realize the misfiring of his John Deer would sputter sparks across his acreage. Took every fire fighter in the county to put that one out. It may be enchanted, but no magic shields this land from man. © 2001 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 07-17-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Corinne, this is inspiring verse and I can feel you put a lot of thought ot it. IT's refreshing to read something that isn't just splashed up there on the page, thank you. "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, Corinne, you have described this scene so vividly. Great work!  All writing comes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It wasn’t difficult to imagine, these serene hills may look like soft wheat, but nothing burns like dry grasses, the scourge of western summers. When the wind shifts, circles from the north, we call it El Diablo - the devil's furnace, fuel for pyros ========================== It may be majestic, but no magical shield protects this land from man. ========================== Very cool write C... the imagery is sharp, vivid and cleverly done with your vocab and phrasing. What always impresses me most about your work is that you can write about anything and make it your own. A true sign or measure of a talented poet/writer. well done. take care jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
brilliantly described, fantastic ending, an epiphany reflected, it seems. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Not surprising to me at all that you would receive ... Glad all is well. Enjoyed the telling~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
We are indeed our own worst enemy... Nicely done, Corinne... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
It may be majestic, but no magical shield protects this land from man. Vivid and beautifully told. Fires are so beautiful to watch when they are controlled but how dangerous they look when they rage uncontrollably. "Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne--Fire and dry hot days...a deadly combination. You tell it so well in this poem. We have fire raging behind our house right now, in the Angeles National Forest. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Kathleen, I feel it could still use some honing, though, but I thank you (and I know what you mean about splashing words on a web page). Thanks, Lone Wolf! JM, you are too sweet, thanks, lady! VAS, thank you kindly. Ahhh, Marge, but I keep forgetting how to "send," seems it is much more difficult to do, yes? The interesting thing is that I was on vacation the day of the fire! Nan, I let these things eat away at me. I talked to some fireman and asked them why they don't make it a regulation to force property owners to cut the grass back along major highways. Where I used to to live, in the Bay Area, they were much more concerned, but they had lived through the Oakland Hills fire, too. Hey, Brian, thanks! Fire is a real problem here! Martie - I hope they get it contained soon! Earthquakes and fires, the two banes of California living! Cor |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
they call the wind. . . and you show it to us. . . in all its power. . . great job Corinne. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, rolling hills of black ash. Very good. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Sven and Mirror Man! Corinne |
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