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Blue windowshields
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Blue windowshields |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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 [bIn a mist of early morning sunlight the air filled with tiny sprinkles dew I came upon this dear old farmhouse with windowshields painted softblue Overgrown by bushes of pink roses breathing the air of ancient history can't help wondering about her past wondering about her tales of mistery[/b] A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 07-16-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderful pondering, Titia we call them 'shutters' but I do love your term, the last stanza, is that a challenge?  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I love this "windowshields" wonderful! "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Beautiful thoughts. The mystery is in our hands ands hearts. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Had to put on my reading glasses for this one Titia but it was worth it...very nice...James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ I just LOVE the 'windowshields' ... how much more effective an image than what we call them here. What gentle beauty you've share in this inquisitive piece. Behind the shield of blue memories of the loveliest hue Open for the world to view all the shades of you~ I just love this piece ... and the picture is priceless ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In a mist of early morning sunlight the air filled with tiny sprinkles dew I came upon this dear old farmhouse with windowshields painted softblue Overgrown by bushes of pink roses breathing the air of ancient history can't help wondering about her past wondering about her tales of mistery ========================== this is wonderful, in both imagery and rhyme flow... a beautiful setting to find inspiration in. well done Titia  When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
VAS, yea didn't know the right name so I made one up, pretty suitable I think. Hi Irish Rose, glad to see you peeking through my 'windshields'.  Shadow, thanks for reading. James, over 45 I guess  , but they were a bit small, so I changed them.Marge dear, thanks for your lovely rhyming words. Janet Marie, real glad to see you here. Did people were happy living here sitting on the bench and dozing off after a day's hard work in the fields I'm sure they left here lots of love I think the windowshields were blue to capture a bit of the immense sky holding it's warmth inside in winter but not ever will we really know why What has happened behind that window think of something in your own mind and put it down in a little written story For I'm a bit curious of what you'll find I've removed these three stanzas, because after reading the poem again, I think it's better without them, don't you think? Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Feel free to use the pictures on my website. [URL=http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace=100 ]http://communi [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 07-16-2001).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Titia- This is wonderful! I agree with Marge...I love the word 'windowshields'. I read the stanzas you edited out,and I enjoyed them, but I agree with you that the poem is even better in it's shortened version. Leaves much to the reader's imagination. Very nicely done, my friend. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
A heart for days past, truly romantic! Willie |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely painted... the use of Windshields in this poem makes it more effective, however without the image to go with it I fear I would have thought the windows painted blue..( chuckling) Very nicely done... a pleasure |
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