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Martie

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0 posted 2001-07-14 10:49 PM

Running on Empty

Along the parched road of living
there was a sign that read,
cool mountain stream, first right
at the crossroads.

I had to get out of my reverie
and walk up close to read in small print,
enter at your own risk.

Well, I was torched as you can imagine,
my engine had been running hot
and I could smell the stench
of my own insatiable thirst.

I looked at my gas meter and it read,
running on empty
watch what you do
another dry mile
and you are through.

I knew how to fix that you see,
my reverie was not all I had,
I had a reserve tank of dreaming,
and I had dreamed my way into many a place.

I shifted out of reverie and into dream
and turned right at the crossroads,
and came across some assumptions,
(standing with their hands on hips
in the middle of the road, they were,)
so I closed my eyes and smooth as silk
my dream took me over their stern mouths
and landed me in a meadow,
lupine dotted and poppy spilled.

I could hear the sound of happiness
frolicking in the splash of passion
and I slowed to take a breath
and that was when I saw
my future falling before me,
and turned away.

I gathered my now
around me and fastened it
with the exhale of my intake
and suddenly I was looking out the window
at the middle of the day
and my fingers were like small birds
pecking at the keyboard
and the sound was part of my heart
and I wasn’t thirsty anymore.

(trying to jumps start my muse
with this already been posted before sometime poem)

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-07-14 11:11 PM

Martie~
I don't know about empty ...

'I shifted out of reverie and into dream
and turned right at the crossroads,
and came across some assumptions,
(standing with their hands on hips
in the middle of the road, they were,)
so I closed my eyes and smooth as silk
my dream took me over their stern mouths
and landed me in a meadow,
lupine dotted and poppy spilled.'

But goodness knows you've got a DieHard® fan here ! !
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2001-07-14 11:16 PM

Martie-
   This is great...I especially love
   these lines as well..

       "I shifted out of reverie and into dream
       and turned right at the crossroads,
       and came across some assumptions,
       (standing with their hands on hips
       in the middle of the road, they were,)
       so I closed my eyes and smooth as silk
       my dream took me over their stern mouths
       and landed me in a meadow,
       lupine dotted and poppy spilled."

   Wonderful write, my friend..

   hugs,
   ~vicky

Marge-
   I'm thinkin' more along the lines of
   Energizer...Martie writes, and I just
   keep on reading and reading and reading...LOL

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

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3 posted 2001-07-14 11:17 PM

I'm with Marge..and I'm EverReady to read more! This is so clever!!

How many miles per dream do you get?

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-07-14 11:22 PM

I had a reserve tank of dreaming,
and I had dreamed my way into many a place.

I shifted out of reverie and into dream
and turned right at the crossroads,
and came across some assumptions,
(standing with their hands on hips
in the middle of the road, they were,)
so I closed my eyes and smooth as silk
my dream took me over their stern mouths
and landed me in a meadow,
lupine dotted and poppy spilled.

I could hear the sound of happiness
frolicking in the splash of passion
and I slowed to take a breath
and that was when I saw
my future falling before me,
and turned away.

I gathered my now
around me and fastened it
with the exhale of my intake
and suddenly I was looking out the window
at the middle of the day
and my fingers were like small birds
pecking at the keyboard
and the sound was part of my heart
and I wasn’t thirsty anymore.
=================

BECAUSE....

quote:
I had a reserve tank of dreaming,
and I had dreamed my way into many a place.

Oh you toyed with us the whole way...and then brought us full circle...
clever clever clever...wonderful poetic use of metaphor here...
very cool write Martie-girl
when I read the title...
I thought you had wrote about my muse *L*

Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me the light

Logan
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

5 posted 2001-07-15 12:16 PM

Ahh, Martie, once again, you have played my assumptions like playing a trout and then landed me quickly..very nicely done..very gentle smile

JLR
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since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

6 posted 2001-07-15 12:46 PM

So glad you posted this...it truly read like a dream. Enjoyed!

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-07-15 01:47 AM

I really enjoyed this, especially when I got into it. Lupine dotted and poppy spilled is my very favorite phrase there, but there are many here, it's a very clever write!!

Auguste

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Posts 3953
By the sea

8 posted 2001-07-15 02:03 AM

Martie,

Enjoyed this much, my friend. Good writing, as usual. (((hugs)))

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Irish Rose
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Posts 10263

9 posted 2001-07-15 02:27 AM

lovely metaphor Martie, just lovely.

"It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty

Kathleen

Denise

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10 posted 2001-07-15 12:10 PM

A Martie Classic! One of my all-time favorites! Thanks for reposting it!

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

11 posted 2001-07-15 12:55 PM

This is a great one, Martie. How it changes so from one scenario to another, in perfect flow.
Sandra

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

12 posted 2001-07-15 01:03 PM

Martie,
This is a keeper, I love the way your mind works.

Constance
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since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

13 posted 2001-07-28 05:42 PM

Oh Martie! I absolutely loved this poem. Next time you dream, I hope I'm there with my thumb out. I want to see what you see. Thanks.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

14 posted 2001-07-28 06:00 PM

I remember this one, but the grins are as fresh as ever!

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