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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I raised the placard on my seat above my head at the appropriate time and became part of a message that only God and the Goodyear blimp could see. I wondered if I were an important square or simply a blank space between letters |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i wrote a pome by the same title in the middle of superbowl...... still can't figure out what what i wrote means....... but it was right in the middle of the beginning of it so how could i possibly figure it out anyway? but that was then and THIS , your poem is so wonderfully expressive and absolutely YOU and that, my sweet 'deer man , is perfectly delightful, as are you...... there's no "half" in trim with rhyme it's all the "ALL" of verse in stall on whims in trims or stanzas linings, we're sometimes trapped in timing's words with rhyming off the edge of who knows where in half of time that's settled there. a half time show? damn! you're the bowing...... a star, applause, i'm here now vowing there's no half time in games not playing...... the show's a show in our dismaying... ((((( yourpoemiswonderful )))))) thank you for the reading....... [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 07-14-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
well, I have no doubt that if you were in the game, the bases would be loaded and you'd hit a home run  Enjoyed this very much[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 07-14-2001).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Balladeer- LOL...I love this!  You could NEVER be just a blank space... more likely the exclamation point at the end!!  hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quite possibly the smiley face.... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ I'm sure you were -ing ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Im thinking more like the final word (or the W in wisdom)  (or the S in spam) teehee   Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Doreen....and the show must go on...thank you for your warm comments and poem. If half-time had a class act, it would be you... Rose...I wish you were right! Half the time I never get off the bench!  Vicky...you sweet lady! Can I " " you? sunshine....LOL! Yes, I can picture that Marge...you sweet thanG!! It's good to know you consider me dashing!!! JantMarie...Let's make it the C in Cardinals...go, Big Red!!  |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
What an amazing message and analogy in this one...I'm positive you are not a blank space, though they are extremely important for should there be no space between words, one could scarcely find the message. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well this is different from you...I like the analogy, deer...and we all wonder from time to time. Clever as always, m'friend! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ah Michael ... wonderfully creative and clever, much enjoyed the message in this lovely piece! There is no such thing as a blank space where you are concerned, sweet poet. I somehow feel that even if you "were" given the blank space, it would only be a test to see how quickly you would fill it up with wonderful words that would pale the entire message in comparison. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Sometimes there's a clearer message in the blancs then there is in words. You've been noticed, believe me, sweet Deer. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You are the explanation and the explanation point, my deer. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Aren't we all blank spaces? But being aware of it, now there's the rub. Enjoyed as always. Sy |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Deer, Deer, Deer.... Wordswouldbemeaninglesswithouttheblankspaceswouldn'tthey??? This is wunnerful, my friend...  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very creative piece of writing, Michael! But of course! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I opt for the blank space...the piece that speaks without speaking...a pause, a sigh, a look...more subtle than mere words...thats you big "M" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hah! A blank space would drive you nuts, and it would be filled in a minute. Nope, you would never be a blank space that is for certain. Very creative. ~If you have a choice to sit down or dance, I hope that you dance~ |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
So you were the one holding the letter upside down. I should of known. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
VAS...that is very true!! I feel better already! serenity...different can be good..glad you enjoyed Kit..filling blanks is my speciality. How did you know??? Titia...If I have by you, I'm more than satisfied....I thank you! SY...that we are, my friend, just looking for the right letter Nan..I hope blanks are important..I have one of them on my face most days Denise...thank you, my missing friend I like what your sign says, too! Paula..you have just made blank sound like the most wonderful thing in the world...I love it!!! Mysteria...everything has its purpose. I spend a lot of time in a comma inot2B....Darn! I was hoping nobody noticed! Well, melcome could too be a word! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Balladeer- Just kickin' this one up to the top because football season is here!!!!!!  Woohoo!!! Go 49ers!!!  ...and Cardinals!  ...since they're the home team..LOL! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 09-01-2001).] |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
this is good. enjoyed it. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
You a blank space...don't believe that for one minute...though....a blank space is important too, it keep the place neat. ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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