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desert threading (cinquain) |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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desert threading falling silent keeper dormant screams ~raining wisps of threaded dreams ~desert storming I wait "Trace my body with your words |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
A style I don't read often, nonetheless I liked it very much. I would like to hear you explain what it means to you, the story between the lines. Nice writing, thanks for sharing. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
conjures many images makes one inquisitive for the others more obscure a lovely cinquain even though some of it is mystery to me |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like this very much! You keep a hint of mysteriousness to it, allowing the reader to take it anywhere they want to! Well done! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
it's a lovely cinquain, I have only written one, but I love the challenge of writing many different kinds of verse. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Snow- Oh yes! We certainly do need a storm here in the desert! LOL  I wait too...  hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
A style I don't read often, nonetheless I liked it very much. I would like to hear you explain what it means to you, the story between the lines. Nice writing, thanks for sharing. pure_innocence, although I normally don't explain my work, I know that this can be hard to understand. It is saying, no matter what...I'll wait, we share the same dreams, I know you didn't forget. It's really very deep, a lot of hidden meaning, some that only one other person would understand. I plan my writing so that it's layered. You could very well have only seen the waiting for the storm part. That would have been fine, as it was written for that. :-) I like layers. and I thank you very much for your reply. ~~~~ conjures many images makes one inquisitive for the others more obscure a lovely cinquain even though some of it is mystery to me VAS, conjuring up images was the idea. ;-) thank you very much for your comment. I'm looking forward to being back. ~~~ I like this very much! You keep a hint of mysteriousness to it, allowing the reader to take it anywhere they want to! Well done! Sunshine, Thank you so much!! I'm glad I could do that. It means a lot that you said so!! ~~~ it's a lovely cinquain, I have only written one, but I love the challenge of writing many different kinds of verse. Irish Rose, ahhh, I came across this form a few months back, and I am addicted! Love it! Thank you so much for the reply. ~~~ Snow- Oh yes! We certainly do need a storm here in the desert! LOL I wait too... hugs, ~vicky vicky! ;-) Oh do we ever ;-) I hear there's one coming ;-) I hope anyway lol... thank you so much for the reply again, thank you all.. Snow "Trace my body with your words |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i like cinquains i don't fully understand this but i liked it anyway... post more cinquains! |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
thank you for the comment. I do have a few Cinquain floating around here. "Trace my body with your words |
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