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Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2001-07-14 02:12 PM

Impressionistic
aspen leaves tumble sun's shine
and soften the breeze

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry

[This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 07-14-2001).]

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-07-14 02:24 PM

krawdad, it's so good to see you here again

this is the best haiku I've seen in quite awhile...so many end up being senyrus in truth

I love this, every word of it...of course I'm no expert...I just know what I like

"tumble" that is truly what aspen leaves do to the suns rays

Snow

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since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

2 posted 2001-07-14 02:44 PM

often we get lost in perfecting the form, and forget about the content. in this case, both are excellent.

snow

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

pure_innocence
Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 80
Colorado, US

3 posted 2001-07-14 02:54 PM

Light, breezy, warm, a breath of fresh air. Lovely voice, hope to hear it often.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-07-14 03:21 PM

This is absolutely sunful! Loved it!

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2001-07-18 04:54 PM

Krawdad-
   Lovely image you've created here.
   Nicely done..

   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-07-18 04:58 PM

yes..very nicely crafted to present an image in close focus... I enjoyed!!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

7 posted 2001-07-18 05:29 PM

Yes, it is. And a darn good one at that

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

8 posted 2001-08-08 01:16 AM

enjoyed

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

9 posted 2001-08-08 02:33 AM

very nicely done...I can see the leaves

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