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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17
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0 posted 2001-07-14 12:59 PM



I'd like to think
the world's not ill
and not abrink
the devil's will,
nor it in sync
a crying shrill
about to drink
death's sleeping pill.

Then I breathe
the fouling air
and watch us sheathe
a future there,
as anger seethes
forgetting care
our heirs bequeathe
forlorn and bare.

Taint the water,
litter shores,
shrinking fodder,
people more,
getting hotter,
ozone's tore,
tensions tauter
enter war.

Screw tomorrow
live today
from it borrow
let "them" pay,
forget sorrow,
dare not pray,
watch as we throw
all away.

Greed denies
and won't replace
clear blue skies
we now deface,
is this wise
lost human race?
We comprise
earth's last disgrace.


"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

© Copyright 2001 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
VAS
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1 posted 2001-07-14 02:15 AM


powerfully cryptic, it bites
Sunshine
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2 posted 2001-07-14 08:24 AM



I still have hope that all will turn around...

only when we give up, is it too late...

cpalmer
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since 2001-06-26
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3 posted 2001-07-14 08:36 AM


You have a good view on what the world is coming to and I like the way you portrayed it! All we can do it pray...
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

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4 posted 2001-07-14 05:04 PM


Well this was a great reminder to care Richard, and well done it was as usual.

~If you have a choice to sit down or dance, I hope that you dance~

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
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5 posted 2001-07-14 05:09 PM


~This does bare teeth, sharp and frightening. Well written reminder to take notice and action. *Peace poet.
shadow974
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since 2001-06-21
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Michigan
6 posted 2001-07-14 05:10 PM


Well put, Is't our place to turn this around for future generations. I prey that it can be done!

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21
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7 posted 2001-07-14 05:28 PM


It's called "The Quickening".  To some, "Armageddon".  It's very real and very now, and although we "can't change the world", we can change ourselves and live by example.  If enough people do this, the "ripple effect" can swell into a very powerful wave, indeed.  I think we in this forum are all making waves in our own tiny ways, and THAT is what can help to balance out at least a little portion of this Reality Canvas you have painted here.  Accurate and chilling work, Richard.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2001-07-14 06:31 PM


I enjoyed the clever rhyme scheme here..and the way you carried it out with the vocab choices of vivid sharp imagery to define your poetic intend of message.
well done
jm

Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me the light

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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Melbourne, Australia
9 posted 2001-07-14 07:21 PM


What a chilling piece of writing you have penned, it gripped me from start to finish, wonderfully written.  Take care.....Sue

Suetang

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2001-07-14 08:51 PM


IT's very chilling and very real, I love it!

"It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty

Kathleen

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since 2001-07-10
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11 posted 2001-07-14 09:06 PM


Your style is hypnotizing, educating, and packed with wisdom, not to mention a unique talent for artistic deliverance.. .. I really appreciate the message in this read. Thought provoking... Kudos! Love and peace ((~.~))


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