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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
from blue to grey the notes play on my mind Mournful saxophone tempered with wooden flute trip sadly drip slowly and combine in blue and grey overtures of distance |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I like it, the sounds of it, but I've figured hout what things are being like the instruments because I have the feeling it is not the instruments themselves. Say "Sheesh!" or whatever, but I'd love help on this.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
VAS.. it's as simple or complex as thoughts...which play like music and may take the tones and sounds of instruments. Some thoughts take us places with the feelings they invoke which also have tonality and color...or at least in my warped brain they do... Hope that helps... sometimes I am pretty obscure and vague... so I am sure it isn't your issue but mine in being more clear... Thanks as always for the comment!!!! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I like the title and its theme. It plays with the arrangement of lines, even if it sounds a little sad. I note that you are in tune with your vibes hear... you got me to listen for the string which ties together these thoughts and bands them as a group, but the part that solo'd out for me was the last phrase... Thanks, Ron. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Plaintive. Nice. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, geez, the worst part is, I understand it completely..a very nice write...gentle smile,,I enjoyed this piece |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, this is good. No notes needed here (I can hear it, that is). Thank you for sharing. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ah yes. . . I can see a clash here. . . "the saxophone with wooden flute". . . the different things that come to play in our lives. . . there's a lot going on here. . . I like it. . . well done. . .  ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ Transported on well-noted memories~ Quite the tune !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair, Simple profundity. Enjoyed |
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