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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Cape Disappointment We do not usually equate The results of indecision With beauty. And yet, As the last of the spring freshets Doubt their appearance; And as the tide turns, bringing salt into the estuary, A melancholy light across the bay Wears the inhibition Of a bare, mud flat Yielding to the ocean's influence. As if to cite the difficulty, It stares, but looks away Persistently, as would a woman Turning from the mirror To a memory. RMW [This message has been edited by RMW (edited 07-13-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Well poet sir... I do believe I liked the first the better... it had a quality which made me stretch my mind to encompass the whole of the image..and while this is lovely it lacks the element I so prized in the first... but we both know I am a bit crazy.. ;> |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Hey Cpat...thanks for the thought. You are probably right. But it's fun to tinker. Been enjoying your work. Bob |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Always fun to tinker.... and you know I always enjoy your words... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Well, I like this one better meself, the other took so much of the thinker, so I'm glad you decided to tinker. but, I do like them both, I do Now I've gotta go see if you answered me. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey Bob...I like them both..go figure!  |
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