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The Flow of A Rare Morning Spirit
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The Flow of A Rare Morning Spirit |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Left awake all night within, Pouring words from fingertips, From wakeful moments poetry trips. Light seeks in through open blinds, I read hearts and open minds. Chittering chatter of merciless blend, These thoughts awakened, do not end. There comes the sounds of outside drifting, Through poetic moments forever sifting. Singing softly of lonesome hues, Dreaming daydreams encompassing you. Blending thoughts and remembering tears, Words steal quietly, my roaming fears. Dressed in cloaks of passions dues, My words are here, your eyes to view. Don't follow me into merciless rhyme, I know not how it flows this time. But know it does and I must follow, In maddening simplicity, I must wallow. For if this clutter does release, I'm captured joy, restless ceased. Moments arrive and exit here, As through this maze I daily steer. Frozen time enrapts my gaze, Seeing desires through poets' haze. Rhyming, riddling, aching now, Show my words, this morning how, To come more naturally to a flow, Or simply let me let this go. I'm rambling on with brazen thoughts, Of words and spirits branded aloft. And as you bare your will to me, I'm lifted twice with poetry. So seek me now as I sent, Upon this rhyming adventure spent. [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 07-13-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderful flow to this one even though longer than what I'm used to from you. enjoyed the ebb and flow of the words and messages |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the flow of this is just perfect! way to go!!I liked this very much  |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Seems the "Rare Morning Spirit" found favor in you today to bless you with lovely words and thoughts. What better way to begin your morning than with sweet conversation within. Thank you. -Bob |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely written..and it seems you are inspired today... nice flow to this... I enjoyed!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Temptress~ Could be one of your most memorable pieces ! !  'My words are here, your eyes to view. Don't follow me into merciless rhyme, I know not how it flows this time. But know it does and I must follow, In maddening simplicity, I must wallow. For if this clutter does release, I'm captured joy, restless ceased. Moments arrive and exit here, As through this maze I daily steer. Frozen time enrapts my gaze, Seeing desires through poets' haze. Rhyming, riddling, aching now, Show my words, this morning how, To come more naturally to a flow, Or simply let me let this go.' Wonderful flowing rhyme~ Felt like it was just 'meant to be'~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There is dreaming here in morning skin, Left awake all night within, Pouring words from fingertips, From wakeful moments poetry trips. Light seeks in through open blinds, I read hearts and open minds. Chittering chatter of merciless blend, These thoughts awakened, do not end. There comes the sounds of outside drifting, Through poetic moments forever sifting. Singing softly of lonesome hues, Dreaming daydreams encompassing you. Blending thoughts and remembering tears, Words steal quietly, my roaming fears. Dressed in cloaks of passions dues, My words are here, your eyes to view. Don't follow me into merciless rhyme, I know not how it flows this time. But know it does and I must follow, In maddening simplicity, I must wallow. =========================== OH there is NOTHING I dont love about this poem... other than I DIDNT WRITE IT!!   Jenn this is excellent...in both cadence flow and poetic phrasing... the whole intend of the poem is pure poetry.. a wonderful blending of poetry and emotion this is for sure an IwhishIhadwrotethis and a keeper for late night reading very well done poetess jm Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Jennifer, You already know how much I like this one. I think you've done a wonderful job. Your writing only keeps getting better. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It's great to hear your rhyme and read your words, Jenn, please don't ever stop! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, gentle maid..very gentle smile, it seems your muse has come back to you..your words flow better than ever, I am glad to see, well done, oh gentle one |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
What a wonderful way to start the day. Perfect in flow and rhyme. This one is a true beauty. Sometimes, the less we try, the easier it is. I enjoyed this one a lot tonight. All writing comes |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . you're really getting better with this rhyming thing. . . this is indeed one of your best yet. . . the theme of it is great. . . the flow is wonderful. . . and you pull out some excellent images and emotions to the reader with it. . . I can see that you're trying to find that next step in your growth as a writer. . . don't stop!!!!  ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Jenn, this was fantastic work, and I am glad that you do get inspired by others in whatever way it is coming, it is working, this was simply perfecto mongo! ~If you have a choice to sit down or dance, I hope that you dance~ |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Beautifuly done , Jenn! Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Jenn- This is terrific! I do believe this is my favorite of yours..  Perfectly written.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Simply wonderful...James |
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Qumar Fatthi Member
since 2001-05-20
Posts 59Pakistan |
"Zabardust" poem like you Temptress! i like it very much Zabardust |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Temptress--Very beautifully done!! |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
Jenn, this is really supre cool! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
You must do exceptionally well under pressure. For this is great verse. It sings to the heart! Thank you for writing it all down. Sincerely, Rwood |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
A lovely poem...just breath taking... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Forced from bed in the middle of the night, ringing word alarm in head, race to desk to commit to write, end result? I'd say well said! "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Glad I didn't miss this one..very well written. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I just love seeing you rhyme - and it's good - so don't underestimate yourself, Miss FreeVerse...  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very lovely rememberances,Jenn. Corinne |
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