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At war
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At war |
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pooh Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 12iowa usa |
Hearts at war with the sensation of jealousy mistrust, seeking for revenge damages one's heart beyond repair actions that could weigh heavily on ones's life despite the love jealousy reigns strong war erupts- tempers run a wild words are arrows directed to the heart piercing the soul scarring deeply--forever jealousy begins... wars of the hearts. [This message has been edited by pooh (edited 07-13-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Pooh... sounds like quite a war indeed..might check your spelling in a couple of places...but other than that..strong words and images which do portray a war of hearts make this impacting to the reader... |
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pooh Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 12iowa usa |
ty i hope, i fixed it fingers move faster then the eyes at times. lol |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
gracious me, I'm so glad you left word you fixed it pooh, I was wondering why I saw nothing of what Cpat said. I liked your poem, it was vivid and right on!!! A war of hearts is so horribly painful, too. You've described it well. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Jealousy is an outward expression of some deep inner problems that need to be worked out before a relationship can freely grow...James |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Pooh, I love this...the words are so strong! beautiful job! Word of the heart can mean so much! good or bad...take care Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
nice read--hope you're wrong! |
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