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Illusions of Love |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Illusions that with a wave of hand change night to day lonely to together shape this time of souls seeking for magical connections Behind the curtain in black boxes grand lie all the props that allow the mind to believe yet at the bottom under capes of crepe and doves of paper lies one true thing when empty we hold nothing |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ron, wow..... this is great! the end holds so much emotion with so few words.... the impact is great!  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
SEA: Thank you Ma'am... glad you liked.. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Hmmm. My empty still resounds with hope... what am I missing? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
DECA... think of it as truth that if we are empty we hold nothing..and it is with the magic of caring for others that we fill it up... it is written in a backwards sort of way... it does not say there is no hope...but that if we strip out all else and are empty..we hold nothing.. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
ahhh, to empty ourselves is to hold nothing back, and then, though you are not a religious man, I believe we are to ask to be filled with His will, wishes, beauty, love...for if we empty ourselves and just let anything back in...we leave too much room for demons. I really like your poem, it did seem to have a sad ending, so I'm glad I read your explanation to Deca. Your writing is so wunnerful! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks VAS.. nice words from you are always appreciated... yes, you could take the poem to a religious or spiritual plane as well...it really works on several levels, depending on how you see it being "like" something else... Thanks for the comment!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat: yet at the bottom under capes of crepe and doves of paper lies one true thing I really liked these lines above... Well done! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks Martie... I liked them as well.. trying to capture the illusion again.... thanks for the comment!!! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Rather like a construct in the Matrix, no? I like your thoughts here -- more chewing gum for the mind... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
One hand clapping. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(laughing) I see... since I can't hear the one hand clap... does this mean it is a half acceptable effort?  |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Liking this a lot. Further comments escapes my tired brain tonight Sandra |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
suhweeet yuh |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, Ron, awesome write! All writing comes |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Great Job!!! Let all of you out never hold back.... Dont hold on and things don't run.... Empty out the clutter make room for ..... And its all in how you look at it..... Good Job Thank You |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wonderful, Ron. Just wonderful and inspiring. |
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