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Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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0 posted 2001-07-12 10:10 PM


Please don't ask me why
I have so much love for you
And why my heart always skips a beat
Whenever you come into view

The smile on my face always broadens
Whenever we walk hand in hand
How I love standing with you by the water
As our feet sink so slowly into the sand

How I love your arms around me
As the sun sinks way down low
How radiantly our love shines
Underneath the full moon's glow

How I love the way you love me
How much you fill my very soul
I'm captivated by your being
And as a woman I feel whole

In my dreams you are beside me
As you take my hand in yours
So warmly my heart welcomes you
As it opens up its doors

We sit together for hours
Not always with words do we speak
As we scale the heights of passion
And reach it's highest peak

Your sensual touch ignites me
Like an ember how it burns
You reach so deeply inside me
And so much more of you I yearn

How we wile away the hours
As love takes us to many a place
But all too soon you are gone
As a tear travels slowly down my face

Suetang

© Copyright 2001 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved
WhiteDragon
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1 posted 2001-07-12 10:34 PM


Grr...another poem of trickery.  Make it sound like it's gonna be happy in the beginning, and then last lines...boom, it's sad.  Hehe, good write anyway.  Jeremy
Sabriel.s.h.lover
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2 posted 2001-07-12 11:08 PM


wow. i must agree w/ whitedragon, this was nice and the ending made  it sad.......o well, i loved this one, great job.
~sabriel

So many books, so little time
stupidity should be painful

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3 posted 2001-07-13 08:57 AM


nicely  done Sue... ending turns it a bit sad, but the way ot is presented is exceptional.. Good write
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4 posted 2001-07-13 12:52 PM


SueTang~

'Your sensual touch ignites me
Like an ember how it burns
You reach so deeply inside me
And so much more of you I yearn'


I do like those burning embers~
Nicely done.
~*Marge*~

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MARK V SHELDON
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5 posted 2001-07-13 03:06 PM


What a great feeling, indeed, Suetang...  up to that last part which transforms it all into a great memory...  but at least that much, right?  I empathize.  Nicely done.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

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