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Sven
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0 posted 2001-07-12 09:54 PM


G
rrrr
eaoe
eswa
nsst


S
wooa
alfn
yotd


B
laae
uysn
eskd


H
eeoe
aaml
rrel
tsso


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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.


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JLR
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1 posted 2001-07-12 10:28 PM


Sven---Are you feeling alright?  LOL  Ok, I'll keep 'reading' until I figure it out.

Ok, I'm back...very cool!

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2 posted 2001-07-13 12:10 PM


I like it.  Of course, you might consider the source.
VAS
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3 posted 2001-07-13 01:21 AM


well, I found all the words, but i don't get it...sorry
SmittenKitten
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4 posted 2001-07-13 01:41 AM


What an interesting poem!  

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5 posted 2001-07-13 01:47 AM


this poem is a lil bit different   i got it after a few times reading it but nice poem

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6 posted 2001-07-13 02:35 AM


I confused! but I like it!  I'll have to read this one till I have a headache or I scream whichever comes first!
Cindi

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7 posted 2001-07-13 02:39 AM



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8 posted 2001-07-13 05:21 AM


  

Hmmmm..Ya see..Above is what i'm feeling right now. Kinda silly from the hour it is right now.   Perhaps I'll come back, Sven Pen? Are you resting okay? Do you need your temperature taken? Is this your own secret language? LOL! Very intersting for sure!

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9 posted 2001-07-13 08:07 AM


   P
a o e
s e o
s t  p
i  r  l
o y e
n
s      

Nan
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10 posted 2001-07-13 08:19 AM


KEWL... ..


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11 posted 2001-07-13 08:35 AM


(laughing) I haven't had enough coffe for this type of creativity...I get it... just absolutly cross eyes until I have another cup..and can absorb what it takes to do this.. man..you gotta lay of the mushrooms...

Very Clever Sven..


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12 posted 2001-07-13 08:46 AM


Hi Sven,

Me think's I'm falling and I can't get it! I saw this last night and thought a good nights sleep would help but NO I'm still as blonde as ever   Let me guess it's some thing really simple to figure out RIGHT???  


Love's ya, Cerenity

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13 posted 2001-07-13 09:28 AM


Intriguing piece Sven, I don't know what you were trying but, it's nice experiment.....now get here and tell us what's going on pal!  

Nathan

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14 posted 2001-07-13 11:02 AM




Glad that I could make all of you think. . . here's a hint. . . start with the first letter and read down. . .

The first verse, then, would be:
green
grass
grows
great

  

Have fun!!!!

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15 posted 2001-07-13 01:59 PM


You are a cutie pie Sven, I never would of got it you know   enjoyed it,,

Love, Cerenity

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16 posted 2001-07-13 02:02 PM


Sven, this is so creative!! LOVE it!  
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17 posted 2001-07-13 03:39 PM


ti evol i..kniht..i  
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18 posted 2001-07-13 04:07 PM


Yes, Sven, I got that, and read all the words, found all the words, but the 1st one is the only one I can make sense out of, I still need help. Even if it's getting some sense.
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19 posted 2001-07-13 04:18 PM


I like it...cleveryly done, Sven.


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20 posted 2001-07-13 04:24 PM


Clever Sven. I would respond in a like wise fashion but my brain refuses to be smart for the moment.

"Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song.

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21 posted 2001-07-13 04:33 PM




STOP THAT!

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22 posted 2001-07-13 04:50 PM


        
I GOT IT! errr.. sort of...umm...I have a couple of questions though, but I'll save them til I can ask you!  

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23 posted 2001-07-13 09:48 PM


Uh, are you trying to make me even crazier??
Interesting, but I am still confused as well.
Sandra

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24 posted 2001-07-13 10:01 PM


Hummmm, what a wonderful way to say it....nicely done Sven~


Greeneyes~


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Sven
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25 posted 2001-07-14 10:58 AM


LOL  

thanks to everyone that's replied. . . this is kind of a stream-of-consciousness thing. . . I picked the words that I used because they seemed to make sense together. . . it's not really meant to be "read" so to speak, as much as it's meant to be "seen". . .

so, is it supposed to make sense??  only if you want it to. . .  

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26 posted 2001-07-31 04:23 AM


concrete poetry, sven? you never get tired of trying new things, do you??

i dig your concept!! refreshing!!

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27 posted 2001-07-31 04:33 AM


Very, very clever! It threw me for a loop the first time through, but I got it on the second 'seeing'. I'm not sure this counts a poetry (I am a [pretty] strict constructionist you know) but what the hell?! I enjoyed it!

Sing while you may
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Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen
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28 posted 2001-07-31 03:57 PM


Yanni mishmaoola kedda! Ya gamoosa! Ya haiyawana!  
-Samia

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29 posted 2001-07-31 05:55 PM


I give you an A+ for imagination.  

Deb

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30 posted 2001-07-31 06:40 PM


Okie Dokie, Sven, should I unscramble the words? I know it is good, because you wrote it, but I can't get it. I will figure it out. Let me know if I should unscramble it  

Sauni @~~~>~~

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Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

Sven
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31 posted 2001-07-31 06:46 PM


faterider, no, you know me, I've always got to try to expand. . . glad that you like my friend. . .

Ian, thank you Sir, this is just me having fun with the forms. . . thanks for reading . . .

Samia, um. . .yahiewa!  Theiapods, deiavee. . . weloceoamm!!  

Deb, thanks. . .   they tell me that it gets away from me sometimes!!  LOL

Saunni, read back a little in the thread, you'll find out how to read this one. . .but, play with it first. . .see if you can figure it out. . .    thank you. . .

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