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The Compromise
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The Compromise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Compromise All around the roses grew, their petals open and breathing bees, the path zigzagged through to him, benched under a tree. He knew she was there and patted the place where friendship held the chair, though he was curtained by layers of cascading doubts. He laughed at her belief in crossing barriers, but some of the obstacles he built, he released so they could sit together feeling the naked boards beneath their words, wondering at the way the other thought, for the meaning was all wrapped up in little packages that lay at their feet. While they sat together contemplating what to do with all this treasure, they learned something about each other, for she was want to tear them open and he to take his time. So they sit on friendship’s bench with time ticking the roses closed, while she learns patience and he learns to trust. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
This is a wonderful poem. Full of personifications of human emotion wrapped up in those little packages lying about their feet. You've caught a real good photograph of humanity with this poem. In my opinion, they must be in love to demonstrate such compromise for each other's feelings. Very nice. -Bob |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Hopefully when ready they will meet in the middle...enjoyed! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Martie: a very wise insight told through a fairytale-like setting and manner. A unique feel to this story -- one which presents the message without imposing it... Very artistically done! (BTW: did you mean to use the word "threw" instead of "through" in the line "the path zigzagged threw"?) -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." "Everyone can hear; few can listen." [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie...nicely done....a lovely arrangement. Bob |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martiesque in every way...from the boards...to the flowers...to the emotions so carefully wrought... how many ways can I say that what you write pleases me, each and every time? I don't know. But I won't quit, if you don't. Hugs... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bob--Thanks so much for your reply...I don't think any relationship will work without compromise...not for the long haul anyway. JLR--Yes..that's the way it works, I think. Thank you. Mark--I enjoyed your reply and thanks for pointing out my little oops...I fixed it. RMW--Smiles Karilea--I can't quit...and I'm glad you won't. Hugs! [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I enjoyed reading this, thinking about this bench and all the wonderful thoughts that went into this poem. Thank you for this one, Martie. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this is so very exquisite, Martie, a keeper, may I and may I share with a few friends via e-mail? you know, it would be a wonderful poem for pastors to share with prospective marital couples, although, it would be good to know BEFORE persons were at that stage If I were all these people that had responded so far, I would say all that they have said, so let me echo them here, please. Simply lovely, Martie!Full of wisdom, too! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, Martie...your mind is such a wonderful place to visit....thank you for another glimpse  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - a most telling writing you have done. And so very true... BC |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All around the roses grew, their petals open and breathing bees, the path zigzagged through to him, benched under a tree. He knew she was there and patted the place where friendship held the chair, though he was curtained by layers of cascading doubts. He laughed at her belief in crossing barriers, but some of the obstacles he built, he released so they could sit together feeling the naked boards beneath their words, ===================================== So they sit on friendship’s bench with time ticking the roses closed, while she learns patience and he learns to trust. ================================== I do so love picking out the Martie-phrases... the poetic gems from that mind of yours that see things like so few do... then I can see things thru the eyes of you beautiful write poetess groovy    meFeels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ My goodness .... you just continue to delight! I like this ... it moved right into 'second' place !  BEAUTIFUL ! What a wonderfully touchy-feely poet you are ! Thank you for your thoughts ! *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Martie This is a truly wonderful piece... It's one I wish I could say I'd written... I've come back to read it about 4 times already, my friend... Thanks for writing it...  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
feeling the naked boards beneath their words, wondering at the way the other thought, for the meaning was all wrapped up in little packages that lay at their feet. many nice lines in this one... but these I enjoyed the most.... very nicely written!! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This I know that several people have been through in their lives. This is wonderful! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
enjoyed this alot Martie. "Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- This is beautiful... I love the thoughts you've penned here, and you've penned them so perfectly.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
This is lovely, Martie. It sounds a lot like a love poem, rather than that of friendship. Since we love our friends, a poem about friendship often has that sound, doesn't it? Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am late reading Martie, but you know your writing always warms my heart, and this one in particular you penned so well. Janet Marie picked out pretty well all my favorite lines so know I loved it and here a hug for ya! ~If you have a choice to sit down or dance, I hope that you dance~ |
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Soaringeagle Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 156CANADA |
MARTIE MY SECOND READING IS AS WARM AS THE FIRST BLESS YOUR SHARING WAYS SHALOM |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Martie, I'm fairly new to this post but, I echo what everyone before me has said... I would like to inject some more pats... if I may. Your visions speak from a poetic place where one has to stop and feel from the heart. It is more then the written words; between those lines is a wisdom portrayed with lyrical undertones. Fantastic imagery! Bravo!  Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie Another superb piece to be published some day Beautiful thoughts captured in a unique way In awe Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
So they sit on friendship’s bench with time ticking the roses closed, while she learns patience and he learns to trust. Wow Martie, Excellent writing my dear. Absolutely love the above lines. "little miss understood |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Just when I think your writing couldn't get better, you share a gem with us that takes my breath away with its beauty! I love this one, Martie... its wonderful message flows with grace and delights with imagery that is Martie-unique. *S* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fabulous, Martie, simply fabulous! I thought I'd responded to this before and came back for another read and saw that I didn't. Sometimes you just leave me speechless, I guess! |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Compromise is, no doubt, the best of all possible worlds. You put the concept together in a wonderful way. Hugs Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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