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MARK V SHELDON
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In a corporeal internship...

0 posted 2001-07-12 04:49 PM


I open my heart's curtain --
Inspired by your Light...
Which helps make me feel certain:
I have no need for fright...

No reason to feel worry
Or to be insecure:
You focus what was blurry,
As my heart you procure...

Such overwhelming gratitude
You've helped me to attain
By maintaining an attitude
That all is not in vain...

And through the door I opened,
For you, into my soul
You entered giving hope and
Assumed a sacred role:

Inspiring me to be my best
In every way I can
I thank you for sharing my quest
To be a better man...


(Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON)

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

© Copyright 2001 Mark V Sheldon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-12 04:59 PM


ahhh, good idea, good quest, good choice!
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2 posted 2001-07-12 05:01 PM


very nicely written!

Enjoyed the theme and the idea of being inspired by another to be better than we are today...

I understand how appreciative it can make you feel...


MARK V SHELDON
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3 posted 2001-07-12 05:47 PM


Thank you, Virginia...  the art is to make the "correct" choices...

Thanks, Ron.  It's quite the feeling to let one's self accelerate in self-improvement as a direct result from having been inspired by another.  Isn't that a part of what they call Love?

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

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4 posted 2001-07-12 07:02 PM


Mark, I do think Love will generally inspire us to be better in many ways. (I guess it doesn't do that to everyone, or we wouldn't have so many sad poems)
I like these thoughts, and the rhythm.
Sandra

MARK V SHELDON
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5 posted 2001-07-12 07:08 PM


Thank you, Sandra.  Sad poems, like sad songs, are a great way to "keep the emotional system 'regular'"...  a process through which we can learn as much about ourselves as others can from us.  

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2001-07-13 12:36 PM


And through the door I opened,
For you, into my soul
You entered giving hope and
Assumed a sacred role:

Inspiring me to be my best
In every way I can
I thank you for sharing my quest
To be a better man...
=============================

I love the imagery and intend of those opening lines...
and this a was cadence kissed pleasure to read aloud...
a sincere write of inspiration and gratitude
some times we find the one who helps us become our "better half"
well done Poet sir...

Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me the light

SmittenKitten
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where the sky and horizon meet
7 posted 2001-07-13 12:44 PM


ohh...how beautiful    you have made me smile tonight Mark!
~Krista

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

MARK V SHELDON
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8 posted 2001-07-13 11:36 AM


JM, thank you for your read and comments.

Krista, that is for me one of the highest accomplishments -- to make another smile...  Thank you for reading and replying.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

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