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RMW
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0 posted 2001-07-12 01:51 PM


Cape Disappointment

We do not usually equate
The results of indiscretion
With beauty. And yet,
As the last of the spring freshets
Make their appearance,
And as the tide turns, bringing salt into the estuary,
A melancholy light across the bay
Wears the indecision
Of a bare, mud flat
Yielding to the ocean's influence.
As if to cite the difficulty,
It stares, but looks away
Persistently, as would a woman
Turning from the mirror
To a memory.

RMW  

[This message has been edited by RMW (edited 07-13-2001).]

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Lady In White
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1 posted 2001-07-12 01:53 PM



Well Sir...you did it again.  You elicited a sigh.

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2 posted 2001-07-12 01:55 PM


A melancholy light across the bay
Cannot decide concerning the indiscretion
Of a bare, mud flat
Yielding to the ocean's influence.
As if to cite the difficulty,
It stares, then looks away
Persistently, as would a woman
Searching in the mirror
For a memory.

doesn't get much better than this Bob... nicely said!!!

As always.. I enjoyed!
We do not often
equate mud flats with beauty
but in your hands, and with your eye
you have shown us
that looking beyond the obvious
we can find more
to contemplate


brian madden
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3 posted 2001-07-12 03:06 PM


I like this I like this alot, great use of languages creating something a very soft melancholia

"Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song.

VAS
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4 posted 2001-07-12 03:14 PM


Good write, Bob!

The whole time I was reading it, though, I kept thinking of having been to Cape Disappointment.  Have you?

It's a lighthouse near the OR/WA border, black and white horizontal stripes.  Now, I'm going to read your poem again and see if that question will stop invading my thoughts.

Yep, I like the feel of this and the images presented.  I know I'm missing the depth of it, though.  I'd probably have to sit and chat with you at the mud flats themselves.

psps: I'm back again after seeing Marge's comment, I was able to see the 'melancholy light' of your poem that was there all the time, but I think I must have been looking between the flashes and couldn't see it before.  Now, I'm thinking you wrote this on site, after all.


pspsps: Guess who needs to get a job so she won't persist in these one sided conversations with a person who's not all there, waiting for the person who needs to be here, but isn't cuz he has a job.  


[This message has been edited by VAS (edited 07-12-2001).]

Corinne
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5 posted 2001-07-12 03:33 PM


No disppointments here, Bob!

As always, your work is layered with meaning.


Cor

Martie
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6 posted 2001-07-12 03:48 PM


Bob--You have a very unique poetic vision..I would like to see with it some time.
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7 posted 2001-07-12 05:21 PM


RMW~
No 'disappointment' here ...

Exquisite imagery ...

'It stares, then looks away
Persistently, as would a woman
Searching in the mirror
For a memory.'


I got an impression of a lighthouse lamp oscillating with the sweep of light~

I like the undercurrent of this one, very much.
~*Marge*~

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RMW
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8 posted 2001-07-12 06:55 PM


Thank you all. Would like to add more but gotta run. Bob PS Marge...I was thinking of a lighthouse too.
wayoutwalt
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9 posted 2001-07-13 03:12 PM


o yuh!
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10 posted 2001-07-13 10:02 PM


When one is in love they always look more beautiful in the mirror...at least until tey look away...nice one..

               ~Victoria~

Lone Wolf
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11 posted 2001-07-13 10:10 PM


Lovely write, RMW.  As they say, the mirror never lies and holds many truths within.  Enjoyed this!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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12 posted 2001-07-14 02:00 AM


I really enjoyed this...thank you
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

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