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Remembering More
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Remembering More |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I saw you today. We spoke… Touched hands. In your eyes, Were things I had forgotten. I liked my memories As they were. Now… I leave, Remembering more. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
In a few short strokes.... this hits hard. well done! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you Lady... sometimes memories do you know... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I don't think I could respond equally as well or any better than Lady in White. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I really like the "pivot" of the stanza: In your eyes, Were things I had forgotten. This can be interpreted either towards the positive of the good memories, or the negative of ones you'd rather have forgotten but are now caused to remember more... I guess it depends, as always, on the frame-of-mind of the reader and their conscious choice of dwelling... Very powerful, Ron. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thank you sir... always look forward to your comments.. find them insightful...and as a "would be poet" find it satisfying when some device or turn of phrase is recognized for what it was intended.. Greatly appreciated!! |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
So much can be said in just a few words...I enjoyed reading this...well done! Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
(this is in a whisper) hi, ron, i'm hoping you'll go back into my summer's grace poem an see my reply to you. sorry to interrupt this lovely piece and its comments but you've no e-mail access, which is fine, but then i gotta do this. I still love this poem btw! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ Quite subtle~ 'I liked my memories As they were.' I really enjoyed the multi-faceted memory concept. Nice. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I understand the comfort in memory and the discomfort in having them stirred unexpectedly. Well done as always! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Great write, cpat hair...some things are better left as we originally remember them...like this a lot... sp  it was love that first drew me, |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Takes so long for a partial healing so swiftly bled old feelings. Enjoyed. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I've been gone awhile... but I have been reading I just wanted you to know that I love this poem... Thank You |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
And, in leaving, did you like the new memories as well as the old? |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
What I got out of this was a buried pain resurfacing in a moment after a strong effort to bury it. It's a truth, I think. And as such, is powerful. Thanks |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
sometimes, things are better left as they were. . . I could relate to this poem. . . it's just a memory. . .  ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I can relate to it too, it packs a punch in a short verse, and makes a great statement! "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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