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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2001-07-12 01:28 AM


A single light endures the room
Smoking fingers impending doom
Weaved from webs upon the gloom
The vilest beast has been exhumed

His teeth are missing but a few
His hair is long and unkempt too
And everything is screaming you
Better believe that he is true

His collar’s high to block the glare
You wonder if he’s debonair
A bullet from your silverware
Could only kill his savior faire

He plucks his brow and shaves his chest
He sucks his gut and does his best
To eat the birds of vultures nest
And smell to see if waters’, blessed

The rental shop had one deluxe
He kicks his way through all the mucks
Festooned puddles he seldom ducks
But, for this time to save his tux

He comes on knocking and you implore
“If you’ve no flowers leave from my door”
You hear a curse and nothing more
The rain begins to softly pour

The night is fading the moon so full
Chased the sun like maddened bull
And you are torn from magic pull
To place on head a cap of wool

Your eyes sweep o’er with waking dreams
The moon has left one final beam
Then too it fades with cutting scream
“Nothing is as once it seemed!”

The menace dies and doorbell rings
You hear a voice attached to kings
Say that lilies make him sing
“Your love is here my Lady Spring!”

Lady Spring? You like the sound
This man must know of what he’s found
The peephole sets your heart to pound
You swing the door to look around

His tux is sharp, his hair is neat
Your smile is huge and not discreet
“Make my life be thus complete!”
You shout and faint right off your feet

You wake up in his bachelor pad
His teeth are sharp, his eyes are sad
His hair is long, his clothes are bad
The smell is awful, I would add

So don’t forget that monsters brew
And make their dates on ICQ
Even when the moon is new
They will woo and marry you!



[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-12-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
CocoBaci
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1 posted 2001-07-12 01:57 AM


Oh walt sweetie, these poemtales you write are sooooooo cool ya know that huh and also I gotta say 'me' enjoyed reading this 2day...

*~coco~*

Paula Finn
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2 posted 2001-07-12 02:00 AM


What a scary tale...makes ya wonder who is on the other end of the uh oh
wayoutwalt
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3 posted 2001-07-12 02:02 AM


you two girls hehe I was just thinking on how I met my wife!
CocoBaci
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4 posted 2001-07-12 02:34 AM


awww Walt  
Btw u ever think about submitting a story to Stephen King yuh...

~*coco~*

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2001-07-12 02:35 AM


Walt~
How delightful !
What TomFoolery you used with the lovely title - to draw us in ....
Now we  G R I N !  
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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6 posted 2001-07-12 10:54 AM


love it Walt, I'm sure your wife will too!  

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                

VAS
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7 posted 2001-07-12 11:04 AM


You do wondrous tales of 'real life' events, ( cheeky grin here ).  This flows delightfully well and is a wonderful, cautionary tale.  The only thing that detracts, for a bit of space, is the 'silent scream.'  It's used so much and isn't up to the freshness and originality of the remainder of your poem.  Your poem's too good for it.  
wayoutwalt
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8 posted 2001-07-12 11:12 AM


I thank you all and VAS I am glad you can criticize for it is helpful. Let me take a look at that line  
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9 posted 2001-07-13 07:06 AM


You silly little poetry devil you!   This was delightful!  

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10 posted 2001-07-13 08:40 AM


(chuckling) Nicely told Walt... I enjoyed the tale and the ending in particular



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11 posted 2001-07-13 11:49 PM


There's a little bit of truth in here.
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