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Lady In White
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0 posted 2001-07-11 05:32 PM


Fingerprinting

moments of lines dropped
composed by revelation
he touched them
leaving fingerprints of
mind's eye
on her heart

do you know the feeling
of full
words will not come
breath cannot be drawn in
skin sensitizes
touch
ripples
do you know the feeling
of full?


processionals  
following one by
one
escorting visions of

what’s to become of us,
then


bringing castles from the
sky downward to  
lead pipe certainty of
underground dreams

wherever I am with you
is right


no beast, this,
a good man
who would only pick
up pieces
left behind
to resculpt what once
was, for he saw,

he saw

the beauty therein

his fingerprints
will caress
scars
repair hope
bring forth the
warm

his fingerprints

leaving behind
impressions
even the
Masters
could not touch

awakening desires
never before
realized

his fingerprints

remain


write with grace, all others lose face;
"Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA

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1 posted 2001-07-11 05:33 PM


nicely done.. very nicely done...

always a pleasure to read what is well written....

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2 posted 2001-07-11 06:04 PM


"his fingerprints
will caress
scars
repair hope
bring forth the
warm

his fingerprints

leaving behind
impressions
even the
Masters
could not touch

awakening desires
never before
realized"

I understand this very well, as I've seen it in occur.  Such lovely words here.  Such tenderness in this piece.  Thank you for sharing this.

Michael


Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 2001-07-11 06:17 PM


Oh, you inspire me to keep attempting free verse.
I wish I could write like this
This is lovely
Liz

VAS
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4 posted 2001-07-11 07:00 PM


Oh, yes, this is lovely and captivating!!!


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5 posted 2001-07-11 07:02 PM


I feel that we all do this, at one time or another. . .

it left me with a good "impression". . .  

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Janet Marie
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6 posted 2001-07-12 12:15 PM


do you know the feeling
of full
words will not come
breath cannot be drawn in
skin sensitizes
touch
ripples
do you know the feeling
of full?
===============================

Oh my....
this is an enchanting write....
intense and sensual...
and this is a IWIHWT!!!

Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me the light

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2001-07-12 12:49 PM


LadyInWhite~
Oh, how I like this -

'bringing castles from the
sky downward to  
lead pipe certainty of
underground dreams'


Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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8 posted 2001-07-12 02:42 AM


Oh to be full! Nicely done, I loved this.

If you have a choice to sit down or dance, dance!

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9 posted 2001-07-12 02:48 AM


hi LIW.. this is absolutely beautiful and I thank you for this wonderful treat of a read4me2nite

*~coco~*

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10 posted 2001-08-04 07:15 AM



Lady In White-
   How did I miss this one?
   Glad I finally found it...this is wonderful!

       "do you know the feeling
       of full
       words will not come
       breath cannot be drawn in
       skin sensitizes
       touch
       ripples
       do you know the feeling
       of full?"


   I love it!  

   hugs,
   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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