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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Looking inside For answers I find Twilight, Resplendent with Pernicious mystery, Folding itself over landscapes To hide all that fear The light. Quiet, lonely places… Safely navigated in Daytime, become Traps for those Foolish enough To enter As craven worries Stalk even brave Hearts through The darkened Alleys of Your mind. Finding the light Of discovery Comes only after Nightmares Of twilight Searches. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I feel the great need to bring along a candle, but would need to enclose it within glass, for fear of a breath... an excellent write.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Lady... thank you for the compliment. The poem to me lacks a cohesiveness and the closing is less than I would like as it is too obvious..perhaps one day I will rework.. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 07-11-2001).] |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
The search never ends, my friend -- we simply collect clues to the answer in the process... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Yes Mark.. a journey we must take over and over..with the light we find, being just false dawn followed by twighlight.. Thanks for the comment!!! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I enjoyed the discovery taking place inside one's mind at the most enchanting time of day. A marvelous adventure indeed. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this is so soft and quiet...yet it is vivid, too, in its imagery enjoyed the whispers, because that's truly how they felt |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
A deep introspective piece.....brilliant writing!! Nathan |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
With light at the end of a tunnel that isn't an oncoming train. Well writ my friend. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks sir.. i try to stay off the tracks without a flashlight... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now this reads out loud very well. . . may I offer a suggestion for the ending?? Discovering that the light of introspection Comes only after the darkness of Nightmares It's just an idea. . . hope that it helps. . .  ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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